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TITLE (EDIT)
Dragonfly Mile |
DESCRIPTION
Whimsical flight of fantasy reality as a young woman tries to find her lost... you tell me...
[191 words] |
TITLE KEYWORD
Fantasy |
AUTHOR
D G Williford |
ABOUT
THE AUTHOR
Don't hate me because I'm crazy!
[August 2006] |
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Dragonfly Mile
D G Williford
The cool water swirled around my toes, as the mossweed brushed away the dirt.
I looked down and the weed had turned into little seahorses
kissing my ankles and frolicking in the shallow water.
A silver ribbon fell from my hair and as soon as I reached
down to retrieve it,
it hit the water and became a great incandescent dragonfly
with wings beating so fast, they were almost
invisible. The dragonfly hovered right in front of me,
then veered to the south, heading downstream.
I gathered up my hemsoaked frock and hurried to follow.
After a few yards, my hair came loose from it's combs
and fell around my waist. The long tendrils attracted a
virtual colony of butterflies of various colors and sizes
that wound theirselves into my hair making the most
beautiful natural adornment.
I reached out to touch a fern covered log in my path,
and the log sat up and smiled at me then slipped back beneath
the water.
The dragonfly flit ahead, faster and faster. It was almost
out of sight. I cried out to it, to slow its speed,
that I would catch up.
That was when I felt the shake.
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READER'S REVIEWS (15)
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"Well Deb, interesting work of narrative poetry. You mentioned you were going to base a larger work upon this, and this probably saw no reason to complete this piece, but I'd suggest finishing it before showing it, because it doesn't end as a cliff-hanger, it just ends incomplete. BTW nothing belongs to "it" so change "it's", in the last paragraph to "its"." -- Jerry St. George.
"I don't fucking believe it!!! I haven't attempted to write, much less, submit anything since Doc died and the one person that shot me down back then is the only person that "reviewed" this piece now! Mr. George - if you would kindly not critique my work, I would greatly appreciate it... thanking you in advance D.G. Williford Review of HOTHOUSE LIZARDS D.G. Williford This is the type of piece that I�d love to line-edit, given the chance, because it�s a work that was written by a capable hand that just needs to have some of its creases pressed. But I�m not here to try and convince you to hire a script doctor, this is only meant to be a simple review. So let me stop boring you and I�ll get on with it. You took a narrative approach to the piece but I would have eliminated entire self-references passages which make certain sentences sound wonky such as when the narrator tells of her story beginning by actually telling the reader �My story begins�� Avoid stating the obvious and just head right on into the story via �Ripe out of an all women�s college�� It�s apparent you�ve taken the time to get the spelling, grammar and lay-out edited, which is a good practice, since most publishers will throw away any manuscript if they (A) don�t want to expend the effort correcting the writer�s mistakes, or (B) feel that the writer doesn�t care enough about his/her own work to hand in the best possible copy. Keep that up, force me to hunt very hard to find any errors. There were only a few that I�ll touch upon. I believe most were typos, such as a few mistake contractions �She wanted noone� and mistake separations �new found.� When you did use stylistic alterations to the text it was at the appropriate times �Hi, My Name is Hope� Using italics must always serve the text, if it were something mundane it would only call attention to itself, and you seem to know that. I would have also used italics where you were pointing out specific alphabetical letters, as a way to off-set them from the rest of the text. I don�t understand your use of underlining in at least two places �Mamma doesn�t seem so strong some days. I know it�s none of my business. I� being one. And I�d alter several of the sentences where dialectal speech is used. �Come jine me. Lemme red ya fuchah. De cards fin� ya fucha. Dee no lie. Dee cho� only tru�� It took me several minutes to translate it to �Come join me. Let me read your future. The cards find your future. ??? no lie. ??? ??? only true.� The last thing you want as a writer is for the reader to stop, re-read a passage then become frustrated and decide it isn�t worth the effort. Is it worth showing how the character sounds and speaks to add to the character�s characterization, if the reader requires a translator? Be honest about your answer. There are easy ways to fix this while still making the speech of the character unique from any generic stock speech, and if I were line-editing I�d go over each point with you, but since this is just a review the best I can suggest to add flavor to character speech, while avoiding aggravating the reader is to get a hold of Stein on Writing which is an excellent book even if you�ve already read it. As for the story itself. It caught this reader�s interest. A story weighted with suspense about two young women�s journey by car through the bayou circa the late 70s???, laden with a great deal of detail, though some sentences didn�t require it. Not everything needs to be detailed if it isn�t important to the story. I think the narrative direction of this tale worked well for it, but there were several significant breaks in it when the p.o.v. switched jarringly and obviously many times. You are telling the story through the eyes and words of Drinda, and unless she has godlike powers there is no way for her to see the actions of the voodoo priestess. It is a major first-person to third-person jump. You�ll want to keep it uniform, and while you�re at it make the transitions between the scenes clearer to the reader, immediately answering questions like: where exactly is Drinda heading? Why is the writer now suddenly concentrating on the priestess character? What you�ve done really well in this piece is cover characterization, allowing the reader to get to know each of the main characters as individuals and care about the plot they are placed in. If you have any questions D.G., about this review please feel free to ask. But if you only have commentary to the affect of "You don't know what you're talking about, so-and-so loved my work." then please refrain from sending a response. Thank-you. " -- Author.
"whoa....*walks away quietly* I read it Deb...I thought it was beautiful" -- km.
"Thanks Kim... I needed a friendly voice of encouragement. Hey, I realize that it is certainly not Keats, but I write to empty my head. Maybe I should stick to Word documents. Thanks for your kind review though... I had to chuckle at the walking away line! Missed you...Deb" -- Author.
""Mr. George - if you would kindly not critique my work, I would greatly appreciate it..." -- DG Williford. As you wish." -- Jerry St. George.
"I'm confused you said that you want people to "stab" your latest submission, but you don't want people to edit it. Please don't get mad at me, I'm not trying to be weasely or anything, but just what do you mean by "stab", before I go and make a faux pas like St. George?" -- Jenna , Marketville, GA.
"I genuinely liked the piece, especially about the symbolism and personification of things metamorphosizing (sp?) into creatures. Just want to make sure I got a good grasp on the piece. Is this the opening chapter to the larger piece you want to create, or is this self-contained and the larger work will be inspired from it? Please don't take my head off, raw typing just makes me come off as such an ass, I'm really not. ha, ha. :-)" -- Jenna, Marketville, GA.
"Jenna - I did indeed write that in the Advisor, but little did I know that Mr. George was still lurking around among "his subjects". I would think that he would be among his equals. Thanks for reading this piece and giving me your thoughts. I appreciate that, more than you can know. Deb" -- Author.
"I would love to be able to write symbolism as Alice Hoffman writes, but alas, I'm a lonely writer just trying to get ideas, thoughts, garbage and clutter out of my brain. I have been struggling to write a novel about two girls that set out from the upstate of S.C. to the lower part of the state on a journey steeped in voodoo and such... but as you can see in the above review, it didn't help my morale too much. I won't let one person stop me, especially one that thinks he's Shakespeare incarnate.... Deb" -- Author.
"Hey I know what you mean, I used to get so pissed off at my English teachers in school, because they were always pointing out where they thought I needed to improve, they meant well, but they really pissed me off, because they were picking on my baby you know. My stories are like my babies, I raise them, love everything they do, and if someone should so much as point out a mole on them then there'll be hell to pay from this mother hen. I can sympathize with you. You just might want to avoid asking other people to help you in the future if your work is too personal to you, especially poetry which I don't think anybody else has the right to mess with, since its from the heart." -- Jenna .
"Thanks Jenna! I agree with everything. I didn't even remember putting anything in the Advisor until I saw it the next day. I usually get inspiration to write from an unusual occurance, or drinking a good Merlot. I think it was the latter that evening. I will refrain from asking for help, just opinions from now on, with the hope that readers will enjoy delving into the madness that I call my brain now and again. Have a great weekend! Deb" -- Author.
"Its called constructive critisim, deal with it and move on. its there to help you improve not hurt your feelings" -- m.
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"I got dizzy just trying to figure out who's reviewing and who's responding. The piece is incomplete, which is a big no-no as far as I'm concerned. Fifth paragraph - wound THEIRselves?? Shame on you. " -- Richard.
"A while back, I had mostly positive impressions of your writing. Your last few efforts seem to reflect a pervasive mood of impatience and curtness. This mood is also evident in your responses to criticism, particularly the comments of St. George. I've known several women your age who displayed similar mood swings - apparently they were going through menopause. " -- Richard.
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STORYMANIA PUBLICATION DATE
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