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TITLE (EDIT)
Four Months |
DESCRIPTION
This is not meant to be a trite romance, although I know that it can come off that way. It's just a story about my favorite night. Please make comments, I'd love to hear what you think.
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TITLE KEYWORD
Teenage |
AUTHOR
Hopii Canterfield |
ABOUT
THE AUTHOR
My apologies if my work comes off as yet another sappy teenage story, but that's my life. I'm an eternal fairy-tale believer, and consequently that's how my life reads. I welcome any suggestions or comments, bearing in mind that I have no clue what I'm doing. I'm just a girl who needs a cathartic release.
[January 2003] |
Four Months
Hopii Canterfield
It was an incredible night. There they sat, ridiculously in love, in the restaurant that had witnessed her whole life. It was her backdrop, and now it was watching her happiest moment. It seemed to be there at all the right times. When she was a little girl, it watched the rare sight of her devouring something green. It provided the curried chicken salad that she was eating when her parents decided to let her out with a boy, in his car, completely alone. The restaurant was there the night she passed her driving test, and every happy moment in between. But most importantly, it was there now, on her four month anniversary. She realized the superficiality of measuring a relationship in months, but she didn’t care. It was theirs, it was real, and that was all that ever mattered. She never minded the similarities they had to every other high school couple. The only thing they ever cared about was each other, and it was beautiful.
For him, it was a different story. This was the restaurant where his father had taken him as a child. Like all other memories of his father, it evoked a pain that he would never be able to share. She knew him better than anyone, and she was constantly aware that he couldn’t express the pain his father caused him – not even to himself. She protested vehemently when he suggested they come here, because she knew it would hurt him. As usual, she wanted to do everything in her power to shield him from pain. What the girl didn’t realize is that he was the only person in her world who could love more completely than she could. He knew what this place had been to her, and that made it happy for him. Somehow, watching her pick out the tomatoes from her salad erased the pain that had been etched there so many years before. They had a way of secretly solving each other’s hidden problems, although neither of them realized that yet.
After dinner they went to sit by the river. Even the bench was familiar that night. It was the bench where she sat nearly a year before, eating ice cream in the freezing cold with her first boyfriend. The only comparison she cared to make was that she was happier tonight than she had ever been with anyone else. He held her as they sat there laughing. The moonlit sky was hopelessly romantic, as was the case with most of the features in their escapades. She noticed a star and made a wish. Her wish was irrelevant, it’s what she had been wishing for the past four months. All she ever wanted was for them to be happy. And that star was just another of the many tools she employed to try to make her wish come true. What she didn’t know is that her life was about to change.
This particular girl had a tendency to become outrageously giddy when she was happy, and this night was no different. She insisted that he wish upon the star, even though it was not exactly the first one to appear. She claimed that it was still lucky, because it was the first one she had seen that night. He humored her, and made a wish. After about four seconds, she asked him what he had wished for. He fumbled around the point for a minute, finally admitting that he wished that she’d always be happy. Until that moment, she didn’t know that such selfless love was possible. She loved him more than anything, but her wish had still contained a taint of selfishness. His wish was pure, and she envied that. The amount of shame that she felt was just enough to change her forever. She had read all the fairy tales in the world, and could spot true romance from a mile away. But until that star, she had never known true love.
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"Your right it is predictable and trite, it sounds just like sopmething my exgirlfriend would right. I think for being in high school though you have alot potential. Keep writing." -- B.A..
"1. Title: The title while acceptable kept leading me to think of the Hugh Grant movie “Nine Months.” 2. Spelling and Grammar: Hyphenate “four month.” After “irrelevant” use a semicolon. “The only thing they ever cared about was each other…” I detect an error in this sentence, but I’m uncertain as how to fix it. 3. Opinions: Interesting. And also curious that it shold have a word-count of 666. I wonder if this was intentional. 4. Options: Run that sentence by an English professor." -- JA St. George.
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STORYMANIA PUBLICATION DATE
January 2003 |
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