On A Cold Winter's Night by Bg Ryan - [76 words]
Crowded Rooms by Bg Ryan - [69 words]
Fear Silo by Elboc Noj I know I'm not the only one filled with fear... [93 words]
Wanderlust by D G Williford You guess... vampire... or lover??? [150 words]
You Threw It Away by Jeni Jopes When someone says they love you, then they dont care suddenly and they just leave for no reas... [133 words]
You Sink So Deep by Jeni Jopes It's about a person I know that didn't care about anything. [146 words]
You Never Changed by Jeni Jopes How my ex boyfriend never changed a damn thing when he knew it was the best thing for him. Oh... [72 words]
Wrong File by Jeni Jopes My opposite friend. [88 words]
Writer's Passion by B C Mercer - [10 words]
When You Left by Jeni Jopes This is a poem about one of my best friends who moved to Chicago because of his father's job. I m... [123 words]
What's The Use? by D Donely Just my usual ramblings about... things. [74 words]
What's The Point? by Jeni Jopes Just what was in my head. [117 words]
Waltzing Whatever by Erik Sjoen - [240 words]
Walking Alone by Sara Roggy About how much of an impact someone had on my life. [135 words]
Too Young by D Donely Just my ramblings about how people seem to underestimate me just because of my age... *sigh* [90 words]
Things Aren't As They Seem by D Donely Please read and criticize all you want. Thanks. [90 words]
The Wait by Christopher Syrett - [58 words]
The Trip by Jeni Jopes Someplace or somewhere I go every day it sux. [70 words]
The Talking House by D G Williford Echoes of old earth and stone.. are you listening? [107 words]
The Pressure by Sara Roggy This poem is about peer pressure, and things it can make people do. [223 words]
The Presidents by D G Williford Twisty and hidden.. You tell me.. I'll let you know if you're right. [122 words]
The Jump by Sara Roggy This is about a dream I had when I jumped into a river, wanting to die. [160 words]
The Entrance by B C Mercer A sonnet. [90 words]
The Edge by Christopher Syrett - [76 words]
The Change by Jeni Jopes How I changed. [197 words]
The Beating Of Wings
Tell Me The Way by D Donely I wouldn't mind some feedback on this, and my other poems, thanks. You readers rock my world!:) [93 words]
Spiritual Embrace by B C Mercer - [11 words]
Southern Beauty by B C Mercer Haiku of my home-state, North Carolina. No it's not an advertisement as mentioned in the revie... [7 words]
So Lonely by Jeni Jopes Everyone gets lonely now and then. I just do it more often. [123 words]
Silenced Heart by M Q Walters - [50 words]
Running Down My Face by Sara Roggy This is about how someone erased my tears, but then brought them back. [115 words]
Rules To Live By by D Donely Just a short poem that I wrote. I wouldn't mind having feedback. Thanks. [85 words]
Procrastination 2003 by D G Williford Waiting can be the death of you. [87 words]
Over by Glen Pearson A rare show of real feeling... [36 words]
Oceanic Orchestra by B C Mercer - [12 words]
Now And Then by B C Mercer - [185 words]
Nocturnal Juices by D G Williford Sexual demon encounter. [103 words]
Murder By Slumber by Erik Sjoen - [156 words]
Mother Please by Skyler Drevan A poem about a mother in dire need of help. [133 words]
Moksha by B C Mercer A spiritual poem. [170 words]
Magic And Wizards by D Donely Just a weird little poem. I was on a fantasy kick... by the way, I love any/all feedback!than... [116 words]
Madness Amongst The Dust by D G Williford Ssshhh! [81 words]
Lucky 17th by Buxton For the women I love dearly. [139 words]
Lost Time by D Donely I didn't write this actually, a friend of mine did. Just read and review. [54 words]
Life's A Soap Opera by Sara Roggy About my life being a soap opera with not enough love and too much drama. [118 words]
Kill Me by D Donely - [51 words]
I'll Be There For You by D Donely Just a lil' something my (ex) bf wrote me one time... I love it. [44 words]
I Won't Break by D Donely - [63 words]
I Was Bored... by D Donely I swear I wasn't high when I wrote this. Don't ask.. [124 words]
I Know You Love Me by Sara Roggy About a friend who I know really loved me, but couldn't say it. [171 words]
I Hate You!! by D Donely Just a poem about how I felt when my boyfriend and I broke up. It's not too well written, but, it'... [115 words]
How Do You Feel? by B C Mercer - [142 words]
Hounds by David B Doc Byron Doc Haliday, legendary sidekick of Wyatt Earp, pays his dues. [180 words]
Grandad by Christopher Syrett - [163 words]
Go Shut Down by Jeni Jopes This is about my worst enemy and how I would do anything to get her out of my life. thats like it.... [78 words]
Friends Forever? by Sara Roggy About how people say they are your best friend but then really hate you. [213 words]
Forget It by Sara Roggy About a friend who used to be my best friend but has now pretty much abandoned me. [138 words]
Floaters by D G Williford Beware of things that fly peripherally... [118 words]
Faust's Hotel by David B Doc Byron A habitual sinner checks into a cheap Hotel he can't check out of. [103 words]
Emotional Rollercoaster by B C Mercer - [267 words]
Don't Say It by Sara Roggy Don't say you don't love someone until you give it a try... [207 words]
Don't Pity Me by D Donely - [42 words]
Dilemma by B C Mercer - [134 words]
Determination by B C Mercer - [220 words]
Dante's Hotel by David B Doc Byron A sinner checks into a Hotel he can't check out of. [103 words]
August 1963 by Erik Sjoen Words. [352 words]
Are You Smiling? by Jeni Jopes This is about a selfish person that I know just read it and see. [158 words]
Always Have God by Sara Roggy No matter what happens, or who I becomes, I will always have God to care about me. [108 words]
All Alone... Just Me by D Donely - [65 words]
A Prayer For Lovers by L A Winterburn As the title suggest's. [30 words]
A Mother's Magic by B C Mercer - [9 words]
3193 25 Hours A Day by Erik Sjoen - [509 words]
2:50 Am by Jim Nicholson - [37 words]
15 Minutes Just IsníT Enough by Erik Sjoen - [233 words]
021 Enter by Erik Sjoen Do tell.. [829 words]
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The Beating Of Wings
For you to decide.
Who me? Born in 1962. Wrote prolifically as a teenager, heavily influenced by books & the music of the time. Stopped writing for 20 years more or less. But started again...
Some of the work here dates from the "early period" - 1979-1982. The rest is since 2000.
I`ve no idea whether I`m a better writer now or then. Maybe I was never any good! I`ve always wondered.
Feedback most welcome...
I've not visited this site at all since January 2006 as I shortly after discovered the unfettred joys of blogging. I'm still writing and actually had a very good summer of writing. I'm posting a recent poem here now but all my recent work is available on my blog - take a look - http://peter-rivendell-poems.blogspot.com/
|AUTHOR'S OTHER TITLES (53)
A Bright Blue Cloudless Sky (Poetry) A cheery work about emotional displacement, I suppose is one way of putting it. But whatever you think. [184 words]
Across Fields (Poetry) - [25 words] [Relationships]
Adventure Playground (Poetry) - [113 words]
Afraid Of Buildings (Poetry) Written one unhappy morning, but I got a poem out of it... [132 words]
Arriving (Poetry) Just a poem about the way I`ve been feeling lately. [65 words]
At Sea (Poetry) - [39 words]
Best Friend (Poetry) Sometimes you can`t even choose your friends. [62 words]
Catch The Moon (Poetry) An uncertain tale of "forbidden" love. [92 words]
Confusion 1 (Poetry) A game with destiny? You decide. [169 words]
Curiosity Of Nations (Poetry) The destruction of an old way of living leads to escape and renewal. [254 words]
Decisions (Poetry) - [59 words]
Decisions Of Allegiance (Poetry) As a teenager, I revealed my most precious secret to my best friend - my love for him. He rejected me. That painful experience influenced some of the thoughts in this poem. [150 words]
Deep Water (Poetry) Just another day. I know this feeling but we`re not close friends, fortunately. [107 words]
Distortion (Poetry) Written about a million years ago, but still makes a kind of sense...? [129 words]
Drowned (Poetry) A lyric for a love song of sorts - [293 words]
Echoes On Water (Poetry) - [19 words]
Expedition (Poetry) A view of the future? Or a view of the past? Is there any difference? [170 words]
Falling (Poetry) the first poem I wrote after years of not writing... it`s about a feeling that I often have lately, that somewhere along the line, something`s gone horribly wrong and I can`t quite put my finger on it... [132 words]
Flow (Poetry) - [106 words]
Flowers That Only Last A Day (Poetry) - [40 words]
Global Warming (Poetry) - [64 words]
Gone (Poetry) Being miserable is the new black. [197 words]
Heart Of Our Home. (Poetry) Betrayal is not always the greatest betrayal. [83 words]
I Wait (Poetry) Another tale of urban anxiety... probably as much a song as a poem. [133 words]
In Memoriam (Poetry) Short and bitter-sweet. [38 words]
Isolation (Poetry) A poem about... [26 words]
Magazine (Poetry) This poem was inspired by the Berlin novels of Christopher Isherwood (which inspired the musical "Cabaret"). It`s a story set at the moment when you realise that while you`ve been oblivious to events ... [251 words]
Marching Band (Poetry) When love fades... a lyric as much as a poem... [96 words]
Nightscape (Poetry) - [100 words]
Nightwalk (Poetry) About walking alone at night. That`s it. [193 words]
Opening Up (Poetry) Am I no longer enjoying my job...? [198 words]
Paused In Traffic. (Poetry) The January blues, I guess. [100 words]
Performers (Poetry) When you feel like an outsider, sometimes you hope no one ever notices... Written when I was 18. Seems strange to me now, but can just about remember feeling like this - glad I was able to write it do... [239 words]
Pierrot (Poetry) A love letter, after a fashion. [196 words]
Pushing The River (Poetry) - [39 words]
Random Acts (Poetry) Written by writing lines at random and then organising them into a more "organic" kind of flow - and somehow, it tells a story and makes sense. Just an experiment, but a telling one? [204 words]
Sarcophagus (Poetry) Grief and betrayal in a bleak landscape. [204 words]
Scared (Poetry) - [74 words]
Scratched To Grey (Poetry) ... being in love with someone who can never love you back... [145 words]
Sequence (Poetry) Playing and losing a game with fate. [202 words]
Silent Command (Poetry) - [208 words]
Swimming Against The Tide (Poetry) - [90 words]
The Fundamental Loneliness And Futility Of Our Lives In The Context Of The Vast Infinity Of Time And Space... (Poetry) A feeling. [28 words]
The Storm Inside Him (Poetry) The Storm Inside Him [108 words]
The Trees (Control) (Poetry) It`s up to you to decide. I know what I think. (Title: Control - but that was already taken) [161 words]
Thoughts Of A War (Poetry) Leaving home... [240 words]
Threats (Poetry) Sometimes, even in a crowded place you can feel totally alone... [73 words] [Gay & Lesbian]
Trapped In The Masque (Poetry) A dark hymn for troubled times. [120 words]
Triptych (Poetry) Three linked poems about alienation. [339 words]
Two (Poetry) Just a fragment... but it tells the whole story. [24 words]
Unending Rain (Poetry) Crime doesn`t pay. [76 words]
Wave (Poetry) - [34 words]
When Winter Comes (Poetry) The struggle to connect. [148 words]
The Beating Of Wings
A sound like the beating of wings,
Doing a haphazard dance against a clouded sky.
Oil-filmed water with undisturbable depths.
Questions that could not be asked or even thought,
A new kind of deception scared him into thoughts of leaving.
What would it take to provoke him into action?
Plagued by a kind of misery he felt so entirely his own,
In possession of nothing so much as those things he could never own.
Driven by an ambition that offered him nothing but a bleak inability to act,
Scared to look around in case there was nothing holding him to the past.
Aware of shadows in the darkness,
His only company in a solitary inner life so painstakingly constructed;
Protection from the intemperate weather of other people,
The purest emotion he could feel without losing it all.
A desolate soul in a winter landscape,
Or moving in slow motion through a crowd,
Merging through other people without making any contact or impression,
Words swam through him like fish in a deep pool,
Separate, directionless, linked yet never quite touching;
A random dance of seemingly perfect choreography.
Would he ever understand or know those intricate movements?
Those gently effervescent strands of energy that protect from collision,
Sensed like a tiny stampede through the hairs on the back of his hands.
Sometimes he felt like he was just screaming,
Terrified that he actually was screaming,
Traumatised by the feeble sobs which he would sometimes find breaking out,
Distress etching itself into his face.
Breathing, all the medicine he could allow himself to trust,
Trying so hard to look as if everything is all right.
Knowing nothing is.
Fearing nothing ever will be again.
The beating of wings.
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"Wow. I am in awe. This is wonderful. I love your style! One thing- I think you mean "traumatized". Write on!!!!" -- Tessa.
"Thanks for your kind words. It`s always great to get some feedback. You made me check - distrust my spell-check even, and "traumatised" is the usual UK spelling..." -- Peter.
"I always marvel at the depth of your writing and this is no exception. Good work as always Peter." -- Just A Guy.
"UK, huh? I'll keep that in mind when I read your works. Love those accents!" -- Tessa.
"Very descriptive but to the point that I lost interest and couldn't follow your images. I caught up again with your thought process towards the end and it made me think of a terminally ill person that is being kidnapped in a dying vessel. Very intense.. " -- D. G. Williford.
"Intersting poem and quite touching. You do feel what the individual is going through and you can feel the angst and pain. I like the poem and feel that the writer has great potential." -- Jason.
"I appreciate your taking time to review some of my work. Your comments were kind and well received. This particular piece, "The Beating of Wings", I enjoyed two-fold: The steady breeze of imagery throughout, and the personal connection it made with me. I am no critic, therefore I will not try to offer any criticism beyond what I've already said, but I will offer you words which help guide me through the practice of writing: WRITE AS IF YOU ABSOLUTLELY UNDERSTAND THAT YOU OWN IT. You may already be doing so, if not, I have found this particular thought to be most comforting. I hope you will as well. Though I have not read all of your posted work, I have enjoyed that which I have read. As for your return to writing, welcome home." -- STORM, West, Texas, USA.
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