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Perspective Is How You View It by Cynara Moore (1) "It began slow but got very interesting after a few paragraphs. I enjoyed it. As a writer of 15 you have a good sense of language and style." -- e. rocco caldwell. War Of The Writers by Michael Harris (7) "Certainly an interesting story, though I was a bit weighed down by your introduction which did not catch my attention well enough. This seems like it could be made into a novel... At times you may have tried too hard to insert your own experiences into the story. They add a nice dose of reality, but one does not want to be too transparent. The story reminded me at first of old-style science fiction like Isaac Asimov, but when the magic occured it took on more of a fantasy tone. Description could be a bit more smooth, but that seemed to improve as the story progressed. Keep Chugging! " -- MithralEnder. "First of all, this isn't my genre or cup or tea. However, I found it to be well written. I just felt like I was sitting in a classroom watching an interaction with a professor and his student. If this is what you were going for, you succeeded. If not, you need to spice it up a bit. Just my opinion. Keep writing..." -- D. G. Williford. "As a writer who also posts here, I must admit that I am a real fan of your work. I only hope that I can spend more time writing short stories like you. Unfortunately I must stick to the genre I work with now. You, please keep writing as it fits you well. " -- Skyler Drevan. "Wow! What a wonderful thing to say to a fellow writer! Thank you so much for your comments. They were greatly appreciated." -- Michael, Detroit, MI. "Interesting theme and very well crafted. You are a wonderfully gifted and talented writer with good command of language and style. I can'r say enough of your terrific use of dialogue throughout the story. I feel it is essential in dveloping characters and supporting the plot. You definitely have mastered this art. I also liked the ending. Very nice job, Michael." -- Gregory Christiano, Hopatcong, NJ, USA. "Hey, Gregory! In a land where reviews are rare, your comments are greatly appreciated. I was thinking of making this a longer piece, perhaps a novel or novella and continuing the story of Marsellus. Who knows, maybe after I've finished up on my current works I will go back and edit it up a little. Take care." -- Michael Harris, Detroit, MI. "Ehmm..m. Sehr gut Seite! Ich sage innig..!:) bmw" -- BMW, ..., ..., .... Fighter by E Rocco Caldwell (1) "ERC, great job that brought back some memories though certainly not at the level you described so well. i really like the ending, instinct over all, a nice life story." -- Just A Guy. Weeping Stones by Nand Kishore (3) "very good keep it up" -- kumar.p. "good" -- ush. "super duper" -- vidya. We Are Climbing David's Ladder, Soldiers Of The Cross by Brotherman (1) "Brotherman, you have a real talent of making inner city life worth reading. You find a story in almost anything and this speaks to your creativity. I loved this story with the two elements of crime such as the Safeco building guy and the crips. It takes something bigger than a few jive crips to get drugs into the city. This is a wondeful story. Well done." -- e. rocco caldwell. The Tale Of Wee Tee by Brendan Flanery (3) "I hadn't planned on reading this entire story, just really wanted to take a quick look. I was drawn in by the names of the tries of creatures and then the way that they all changed with each ice age. This story is amazing and full of so many details and descriptions. It was amazing!" -- KM (Michelle). "That should read "Tribes" not tries...jeez, sorry about that" -- KM. "Thank you. I'm going to try and write some more stories that complement it, sticking with mythic themes and expanding on the "Wide World." My email address isn't up but I'll gladly accept any advice or criticism: themidgetninja@earthlink.net" -- Brendan, St. Louis, mo, u.s.. The Strength Of Six Million by E Rocco Caldwell (3) "wow, man. you have such a gift of character. Keep reppin my hometown, dawg." -- brotherman. "thanks, Brotherman" -- e. rocco caldwell. "Hi, Its so nice to read small peices, and you can visulize it so well - i do like reading your work." -- Amy, Hayes, UK. The Saviour Part Two by David B Doc Byron (1) "very good, Doc. This is again working into another piece of fine and disturbing writing" -- e. rocco caldwell. The Saviour Part Three by David B Doc Byron (2) "Yes! This story have all my interests now! Very good so far!" -- e. rocco caldwell. "Excellent Doc! You hooked me again..." -- D. G. Williford. The Saviour Part One by David B Doc Byron (2) "Wow... still amazed at your ability to come up with storylines such as these. As always you leave us with a chilling twist. The moth reference brought back memoried of Silence of the Lambs. Great work Doc! Deb" -- D. G. Williford. "I now look forward to reading your stuff, Doc. It carries suspend and great characterization. This is wonderful so far!" -- e. rocco caldwell. The Knell by Eyitemi Egwuenu (1) "Interesting. " -- e. rocco caldwell. The Evil Root by D G Williford (4) "DG, this was one strange and distrubing story...i think that's why you wrote it. It had the affect you wished on me. " -- e. rocco caldwell. "Rocco... I wish I could say it was a story. I was getting my holiday trauma out on "paper". Sad to say this is a very true story in my life. Deb" -- Author. "sorry to hear that! " -- e. rocco caldwell. "this has to be one of the hardest things to face, feel almost guilty saying good job but you conveyed the message so well. " -- Just A Guy. The Cold, Bitter Taste Of Gin by Darcy K Metz (2) "A damm good story. You really made the relationship dynamic between charlie and tracy belivable" -- brotherman. "I likded this too but was nearly turned off because of the first sentence when you wrote he thought to himself! Whoelse was he thinking to? But i settled down and actually found this a believable and well written story. You took time to develop your characters using the events and situations around them instead of pouring useless information about them into the reader's mind. My concept of Charlie will be different from someone else's and that is good!" -- e. rocco caldwell. Sail Away by Kevin Myrick (2) "This is a wonderful story...is it based on an actual event? You know alot about sailing and that made this s fun piece to read. If you are planning on double majoring do it in English. You have a flare for writing...you can produce some great things if you stay at the craft. You have such wonderful potential." -- e. rocco caldwell. "Yeah, I sailed a bit when I was younger, and it did actually happen. There were a few other 'adventures' on the water of sorts that summer, and the proceeding summers when my dad actually bought one of the tiny boats I learned to sail. thought I would "reply" to your questions. Thanks for the great review!" -- Kevin Myrick, Auburn, AL, USA. Malidor:Ruler Of The Dark Ages Part Two by E Daugherty (2) "Keep it up...you have me hooked! I like it!" -- e. rocco caldwell. "I think this is a great story and I can't wait to read the next one" -- Josh. Love's Seal by Nick Green (2) "To write a story from such a unique point of view and instil it with profound observational insights is quite a feat. I found it hugely entertaining!" -- Al. "A really original idea - a top-class treatment of it. What more can one say? There's real wisdom in this story. Fantastic!" -- Marcia. Last Words by Jesse Landon (2) "Very good story" -- Jeremy Sanlah, Brooklyn, NY, USA. "This Story has such amazing detail and adjectives that inspire my own mind to breed images full of color." -- Anthony C Smith, Minneapolis, MN, U.S.A.. Colloquium...Part One by E Rocco Caldwell (4) "Pretty good. this is awsome. yeah, woo hows that for encouragement e rock" -- C.V.. "I hope you weren't trying to funny! I guess I appreciate your comment!" -- e. rocco caldwell. "I did not like this story at all. It is unappealing, boring, stale, and badly written. I too can leave bad reviews." -- Randy Johnson. "Yes, you can. I'm sorry you didn't like it but it is just one part of a whole story. Perhaps you should read the second part! But I will take your review to heart." -- e. rocco caldwell. Clean Things...Part One by E Rocco Caldwell (2) "dammm fine caption, E. I would love to see what you do with this." -- brotherman. "Thanks, Brotherman. Be sure to read part two." -- e. rocco caldwell. Broken Melody by Eyitemi Egwuenu (2) "So is there some Hindu religious elements in this story. I like your opening line...life is a river. That draws a person into you story and gives it a change to commit themselves to reading it. I liked it as far as a fantasy. i thought the write was unique and spoke of a personal style. Good job" -- e. rocco caldwell. "You write the most beautiful prose. Your word pictures are extremely vivid and your grammar is classical. I am a classics fan and your story is up there with the Bronte era. Thank you for a meaningful and well written story." -- Traveller, Nanjing, Jiangsu, China. Space, The Final Finale -Repost- by E Rocco Caldwell (2) "Not a good story at all. Not worthy of being published. I wouldn't recommend it to anyone." -- Rex M Jones, England. "Ehmm..m. Sehr gut Seite! Ich sage innig..!:) bmw" -- BMW, ..., ..., .... The World At Four O’Clock by Byron Blake (4) "Really great mate. Right spot on. Just excellent in the way you say it is - got totally into the story and mainframe of being there. I'm a big fan of Byron Blake - good show - really great to see more new stuff of his floating around on the internet these days. You've got the tone and banality attitude that is for sure. Great read." -- Frick, London, UK. "Fun reading, moves along nicely and causes you to believe it is really a derranged BBC person announcing. I like BB's stories as well and wish to read more. The other story posted is best read if you copy it off the site and paste it into a blank page document. Wish we could read more of his stuff! Good show BB." -- Uncle Mike, Chicago, IL, USA. "I like the story. Give us more stories, BB!!!" -- J. Fitzpatrick. "Amazing! I am BB Fan! This is so good a read. I first found out about Byron Blake in high school in the 80s when a friend secretly passed around one of his stories. My wife and I wish we could read more." -- Hartz, New York, New York, USA. The Wannabe by Brotherman (1) "wow, brotherman, you are the best inner city writer I have ever read. You can tell a story and master characters! Dude, you have to get your stuff published! Good story...I really mean it!" -- e. rocco caldwell. The St Francis Dam Disaster by Rowan Davies (2) "i enjoyed reading the history lesson told so well. this is one i wasn't aware of or had forgotten. nice to see even in such a tragedy some people were spared, were willing to help their neighbors. good to see you back rowan, it's been awhile." -- Just A Guy. "It's so nice to be welcomed back after so long, JAG! This particular story is inspired by Frank Black's song of the same name. And who says rock n' roll never teaches you anything? If any readers want to know more about the disaster then check out: http://www.scvhistory.com/scvhistory/stfrancis.htm this being one of the sites I used in my research. Some of the pictures there are incredible." -- Rowan Davies (Author). The Road To Hell - Part Four by David B Doc Byron (1) "This is creepy! I love it!" -- e. rocco caldwell. The Road To Hell Part Three by David B Doc Byron (1) "It's getting better, Doc!" -- e. rocco caldwell. The Raod To Hell - Part Two by David B Doc Byron (1) "Very good, Doc. Again you held suspence well" -- e. rocco caldwell. The Legend Of Mt. Kilauea And Santa Claus by Donna Nowak (2) "is this an actual legend? " -- e. rocco caldwell. "Cool" -- Alvin. The Haunted House by Cristina Yacovone (3) "Originality is the essence of writing. This seemed too close to the Hanuted Mansion for my liking. This missed some of the important elements of short story writing such as conflict and climax. There wasn't any characterization that held the reader's interests. But for an eight year to write this...it is very good! You show a deep imagination that is vital for a writer and a good sense of flow of language that will flow you story along. Keep writing." -- e. rocco caldwell. "this was very good Did you see waldisiney hunted Mansioin will this was good." -- J Harris. "What a great story! I was on the edge of my seat all the way through! And to think that an EIGHT year old wrote this!? I can only image where she is now and all the feats she has to of accomplished 15 years later?! Bravo! Or should I say, brava?" -- A. Harris, Springfield, MO, U.S.A. The Brethren Part One by David B Doc Byron (1) "Again, you have provdied great suspense. " -- E. ROCCO CALDWELL. The Brethren Ending by David B Doc Byron (1) "I truly enjoyed this story. I don't know hwy because normally I don't like stories like this but you have a great style that can keep a writer interested and compelled. Good job, Doc!" -- e. rocco caldwell. The Blood Taster's Club - Ending by David B Doc Byron (2) "Excellent! Bravo, doc! You are the master of the genre! I really liked this story as I read it I could picture it the feature story of a mazagine! well done!" -- e. rocco caldwell. "I totally agree with Rocco! Your characters are so well written that I can see them down to the clothes they are wearing and their mannerisms. Excellent writing! Deb" -- D. G. Williford. The Blood Taster's Club Part One by David B Doc Byron (1) "I am amazed how you constantly developed great and interesting characters, Doc. This is no exception! " -- e. rocco caldwell. Snowball's Tale by Sheryl Hanna (2) "I thought this was a cute story about a cat. I liked it very much." -- Arthur Williams, Eureka, CA, USA. "This is such a nice story about a cat. I really enjoyed reading it." -- Alexandra Moltk, Boise, ID, USA. Shapeshifter The End by David B Doc Byron (3) "So he was too smart for his own good! That's poetic justice for you. Good story, Doc! " -- e. rocco caldwell. "Excellent Doc! I loved the twist at the end. Great writing... Deb" -- D. G. Williford. "excellenct" -- aditya, delhi, india, delhi. Shapeshifter Part Two by David B Doc Byron (4) "Intriging, can't wait to read more." -- Jason T.. "Okay not you got me caught up in this story. I want to know more! UFO I would guess. Keep it coming, Doc." -- e. rocco caldwell. "Yes, definitly intriging...more, more..." -- KM. "Okay Doc... Part one is missing. Can you re-submit it? I want to read these in the correct order. How are you doing? " -- D. G. Williford. Shapeshifter Part Three by David B Doc Byron (3) "More...doc...more!" -- e. rocco caldwell. "This story sucks. You don't come anywhere near the big truckers! Boo-yah." -- C. "Big trucker? Boo-yah? o...k Doc, this is really good!" -- KM. Shapeshifter - Part One by David B Doc Byron (1) "Good description, Doc. I was a little bothered by the racist and homephobic terms but I believe it speaks to the character and not the writer. I have always believe you are one of the finest writer on this site and you proved it again." -- e. rocco caldwell. Shapeshifter Part Four by David B Doc Byron (1) "So far so very good!" -- e. rocco caldwell. Shapeshifter Part Five by David B Doc Byron (1) "Okay this took me by surprise! I wasn't expecting this...now I really have to find out the end!" -- e. rocco caldwell. Semantics by E Rocco Caldwell (16) "A fine scene, I'd love to see you do more with it" -- Brotherman. "Big truckers rock the road, you don't." -- C. "Nice piece, and I think that C is a real asshole, though I'm sure you'd agree, if you even bother to keep his posts, or even waste your time looking at them." -- Kelly Battinger. "Thank all of you including "C" being he took time to post you remarks. Sometimes we just want people to know we are alive!" -- e rocco caldwell. "Don't worry Kelly one day you'll reach ho status." -- C. "This is excellent and i would love to see you expand on it. Nice job!" -- KM. "Interesting piece Rocco... I too would like to see you follow this with more. Great job! " -- D. G. Williford. "needs a little background music - maybe 'beat it'. " -- JAG. "I've perused much that you have written, mostly out of curiosity to develop a mental picture of you. You are most likely a young, black man (probably homosexual) who has a deep seated hatred for whites and the white establishment in general. You have some literary talent but your vision of your own ability and intellect is greatly exaggerated. You are a free man, yet nearly everthing you write about has the aura of lashing out at an enemy who would seek to enslave you. I suspect you are filled with paranoia, the primary source of which is your own guilt." -- Richard. "And what university did you get your degree in psychology? First off, I am African-American but you missed on everything after this. I happened to be Married with two lovely daughters and a wonderful wife. I am a Assistant Pastor at a Christian Church and have worked inner city ministries since I was 18 I am 43 now. I have been a youth pastor for a number of years prior to being a Assisant pastor. I don't hate homosexuals but believe they are tormented because of other's inabilities to look beyond their own insecurities. I don't hate anyone but write about people I know...a lot are angry at the system that tehy see is white. There is freedom and yes I know I'm free but only to a point as are you. The presumption you make is that you are free yourself...but in reality we are tied down by the laws and cultures we participate in. I write about these cultures and mindsets! I appreciate your commit on my ability to write even though it was sort of a slam but I write what I feel. There's racism in the world, in this country on the strrets and in the workplace...that's reality! To ignore it is foolish. But at the same time there are people like I individuals I was blessed to meet to show me a different side to this world. I know there are more people who don't see race in the world that do! I have no guilt...Jesus my Lord freed me of all guilt. " -- e. rocco caldwell. "You say our freedom is limited to the laws and cultures we participate in. What else is there? To wander aimlessly through life without having beliefs in a fundamental culture and laws, which are based upon a belief in God, is to grant license to any type of behavior. Incidentally, this is where we are headed, with the emphasis on secularism, not only in this country but throughout Europe. Our eutopian vision of a global economy is running parallel with global secularism. No God, no morality, no right or wrong and a reliance on a socialistic ideology to take from the successful and reward those who have no desire to be successful. " -- Richard. "Look, Richard, I can careless about the philosophical mojo you are talking about...you attacked me as an individual saying things that weren't true based on your bogus analysis of me! As a writer I write about things I think will entertain and perhaps educate (not always) a reader. I write about things I believe in and things I don't. To base an analysis of a person on his or her creative writing is ...not very smart! I wanted you to know how wrong you were about me...Everything esle is inconsequential! The fact is you don't know what i think or anything else! It's best to keep it that way!" -- e. rocco caldwell. "Writing to entertain? I don't see much of that in your work. Educating others requires objectivity. Likewise, I don't see much of that from you. I apologize to you for assuming you were gay. Your writing reflects more than merely acceptance of the homosexual lifestyle, which caused me to reach that conclusion. You ought to read David Horowitz's "Left Illusions." It might change your perspective about white America." -- Richard. "First, I'm not white and you're not black! We are npt going to enjoy the same things. Objectivity is not seeing things the way you see them but my providing other views Views you might not like or accept or even believe in) because diversity is the cornerstone of objectivity. I would suggest you read the collective works of Noam Chomsky but you will already make an assumption concerning him because he wouldn't agree with your views. You made conclusions about me based on what I wrote but maybe the fact you're hung up on gays is because you have deep-rooted homosexual tendencies and why you think my stuff is racial is because deep down you are a white racist? See, I can make whatever assumption I wish concerning you and what you write. I don't accept the homosexual lifestyle...if you read the piece I did on gay marriage you would see that I never condoned gay marriage I just simply stated it was constitutional. See I can look beyond my own religious understanding to make a objective statement on an issue. Something you can't seem to do. In your world if poeple don't believe the way you believe they are wrong pure and simple...I stop believing I was God a long time ago. I can co-exist in harmony with those who don't believe the way I do. It doesn't lessen me as a person one bit. I learned this by writing. Yes, I write to entertain. Some people like what I write and are entertained by it...some like yourself don't! I'm sorry about that. We are educated everytime we read something regardless if you accept it or not! This is the process of be educated! " -- e. rocco caldwell. "I don't want to beat this topic to death but I will say that I've been aware for years, of the Freudian bullshit about latent homosexuality. This theory is embraced primarily by homosexuals themselves, perhaps because it comforts them to believe that most men are not too far removed from them. Thus, education is only meaningful if it is based upon fact or truth and substance as opposed to unproven theory. Granted, you see the world from a black man's perspective, and it may be quite different from mine, but that does not mean it is reality nor does it mean that others should accept your view merely because it is diverse. Diversity in itself, is not a virtue. " -- Richard. "Okay! I teach Christian Apologetics at my church along with recognizing Christian cults and I have learned when a person isn't debating in order to be enlightened so the best thing to do is to end the conversation. You are not willing to listen to a thing I have said but only wish to criticize my because if you would agree to any point I have made it may lessen you in some way! I'm sorry you assume I hate white people and that I am some how pushing a homosexual agenda and that my writing talent is distorted by over exaggerated vision and intellect. Your opinions and you can have them! I hope they keep you warm in the chill of ignorance and egotism! God bless you and have a safe and long life! Rocky out!". " -- e. rocco caldwell. Path To The Top Of The M Ountain by Susan Brassfield Cogan (1) "a nice path of enlightenment...good job" -- e. rocco caldwell. Our City's Finest by David B Doc Byron (2) "I liked this because all of the stuff you didn't write but allured to such as his knowledge of wearing gloves, the call made to the ploice was probably by him...this is great non-writing that hepls a story work. This is again a fine job of description! " -- e. rocco caldwell. "I loved this... so unexpected. awesome... Deb" -- D. G. Williford. Mr. Nasty - Ending by David B Doc Byron (1) "Oh, Yeah!!! BooYA! I liked this one, Doc. The twist at the end! Very Good!" -- e. rocco caldwell. Mr. Nasty - A Crimehorror Tale Part One by David B Doc Byron (1) "starting off interesting I admit. I want to see where this is going. I like the way you develop characters!" -- e. rocco caldwell. Mother - Trucker - Part One by David B Doc Byron (18) "That ain't no thing cause a boy gots to shift it into four wheel and run over them bitches and hos" -- C. "This is one of your best...I think you have "C" as motivation! It's amazing how motivation can drive a writer. I can't wait fot the other parts! " -- e. rocco caldwell. "C doesn't seem very swift. I don't think he even realizes you were insulting him Doc." -- Matt. "Sounds like we got some of them lowriders here, can't get it up boys don't worry I'll be waiting with your girls at the city limits yellin thats my truck. " -- C. "Doc and Rocco, I've contacted the Admin. to report all of the non-sensical gibberish "C" keeps spouting off, as well as his peculiar insults of nearly everyone he comes into contact, which seem to come out of nowhere and have no logic or reason behind them. Might I suggest you gentleman file a complaint as well." -- Matt. "You wanna know my reasons little boy, its because you be a lowrider, and it be because I wanna take a big kilbasa up my ass!" -- C. "Umm... yeah dude, that's just great. I'm really happy for you." -- Matt. "Well C, I guess every last damn person on this site is wrong and you are right. Ha ha ha, you crack me up dude." -- Paul G.. "Paul's blatant sarcasm doesn't go unnoticed by these eyes. Hello, Doc, fine work as usual. You probably don't remember me, but I was Girly Girl. I've always been a big fan of your work and continue to be, coming back to this site every so often to check it out. I used to be pretty prolific on this site as well, my most popular work being Ghost Dance, which I think you said you liked, unless that was D.G.. Oh well, anyways I removed all my work because I didn't want any publisher claiming that Storymania had first print rights on it, and now I use www.writersbbs.com where I'm being tutored by other, many of them published, writers and editors. I also stopped using Storymania because of all the nonsense that goes on here, and the fact that the administration refuses to do anything about it, and I see that that nonsense is as strong as ever. I'm sorry you are still forcing yourself to be put through that Doc. Well, if you want to we'll welcome you with open arms at the bbs. Plenty of people there to show you around too, if you get lost. See ya around in any case." -- Helen Maddox. "Hey there Girly Girl, been awhile, I've been to the WBBS, but I didn't completely like it, it was kind of confusing, and the people there kept telling me how I should write. I know, I know... that's the whole point. I suppose it would work for lots of people though, I know that alot of former Storymania writers have fled there, and are really happy about it, but its just not for me, since I'm looking to just post my work for the whole world to see and am not really interested in becoming a mainstream published author and learning how to improve the craft. But for those who are I guess it's certainly a place to go. Don't be a stranger to us Storymania folk." -- Matt. "I see somebody followin me in my rear view and it be them bitch ass niggers. So now you know why they created the navagiational system so you can find your woman when I'm with em. If it wasn't for matt the bitch ass nigga settin in my dust I wouldn't be settin on the west coast while you rolls up in the hunk of junk. So for all the whiny ass pussies like Matt who just can't pull out his own Gat and make himself look like a jackass ever time he talks park your lowriders at the curb cause your ass is trashed when it come to me and my boys." -- C. "Can I get a translation on that? :-)" -- Paul G.. "I don't understand his perpetual insults of lowriders and those who drive them. I am proud of my Latin heritage and part of that includes the predominance of lowriders in the Mexican-American community. My dad once owned a very styling lowrider Impala in the early '70s, and they do have a rather prestigeous magazine devoted to them. " -- Melinda Muenoz. "Me not speak slow enough for you." -- C. "Do you honestly not understand why everyone on this site doesn't have a great liking of you C? I'll explain it, and then that'll be it. You are insulting and without cause to everyone you come across. Whenever you post a message no one can figure out what you are trying to say. We wonder what you want and why you are here. We are trying to be friendly, but your actions just seem odd, alien and insulting to us. I'm sure if you have any intellect you can see that. Please, tell me you have some understanding. In any event, I will no longer speak to you, quite honestly I have no idea what you're saying, except when you tell people to fuck off. I'm sure you won't miss our little chats either." -- Matt. "Matt, don't even bother dude, you can't get through to a guy like that." -- Paul G.. "Well, one can always try, though I think I know what I'll get for my trouble." -- Matt. "Oh so now I am not as intelligent as you. Well at least I am not a lying bitch like you. " -- C. Mother Trucker - Ending by David B Doc Byron (1) "TOO STRANGE...THIS GUY NEEDS SERIOUS HELP. THIS STORY IS GREAT...I DIDN'T SEE ANY OF IT COMING." -- E. ROCCO CALDWELL. Mark Of The Beast Part Three by D G Williford (6) "Scary! But I want more!" -- e. rocco caldwell. "Thanks Rocco! It was in interesting dream. I've been having alot of them lately. I'll try to continue this as soon as I can. Thanks again for reviewing this piece! " -- Author. "WOW!!! As youv'e said to me before; MORE MORE!!!" -- david doc byron , vincennes , ind, usa. "I don't know what happened to Part One... It disappeared... so Part Two has the same reviews and hits as Part One.... don't know..." -- Author. "Great work DG, now you're on the hot seat to keep it coming. btw one time i had a poem disappear and i wrote to admin and they promptly posted it. might want to give it a try." -- Just A Guy. "You know is REALLY FUCKING STRANGE? I just read one of the other parts to this story TWO DAYS AGO. What gives?!!!!" -- david doc byron, vincennes , ind, usa. Madness In The Dark by E Rocco Caldwell (2) "Tell you what, man......... .....YOUR"E GOOd!! I can't believe you haven't been recognized anymore than you have been. But, then again, that's the cost sometimes an unknown writer has to endure. By the way, check out ''Our City's finest,'' and ''The Blood Taster's Club.'' And last, but not least, MERRY CHRISTMAS to you and yours. {Even if you are a black guy!} Just joking!!!!" -- david doc byron, vincennes, ind, usa. "Same to you, Doc. Have a safe and Merry Christmas and keep writing them!" -- e. rocco caldwell. Loverdoll by David B Doc Byron (2) "WOW I didnt ecpect the twist at the end...very good!!" -- Michelle. "Dude, I have to say I was locked into this read. I liked the way you swtich things on the main character. Very nicely done." -- e. rocco caldwell. Like A Hot Knife Through Butter by Rae (2) "I want to first express my deepest thanks for publishing work like this one, i know what it is to feel so hurt on the inside, that your only release is when a blade is in your hand saying what your words can't. This alike all your writting is outstanding and powerful..." -- Rebecca Tantos. "Theres nothing more to say as rebecca has said it all, all i can do is echo." -- Josh / Axey. Leah,Who? by Erma Uppercase (1) "quite the wake up call, think you had fun the night before?" -- Just A Guy. Hunt Party by Xero (1) "i liked your little story, good job. i do wonder, was she a bit salty? " -- Just A Guy. How Is That I Tell You? by Byron Blake (3) "This is the best short story I have ever read honestly - it is completely off the wall and I love it. I laughed " -- Reginald Windsor Not III, New York, New York, Former Colonies. "Wild - weird - totally out there - I love it - my mind is warped!" -- Wrinke Shine, San Francisco, CA, US. "Wicked!" -- HEHE, HILO, HAWAII, UZA. Hedonism....Denied by Just A Guy (7) "Well Uncle Ed! Now this was truly a delightful read! Entertaining, Honest & downright kick ass good prose. You really need to start writing more stuff like this JAG, give the poetry thing a break for awhile my friend because if this was your first attempt short story writing, you've done a jam up job & are missing your calling! Trust me on this one! " -- Monte. "Monte i can't begin to thank you enough for your kind words. never having done this before my nerves were a wreck wondering if i could do this sort of thing. good thing you're a guy or i'd give you a big old kiss. thanks again." -- JAG. "Goodness me....I am in total agreement with Monte ...skip the poetry let's have more of this...definitely a compelling and erotic read. Loved it." -- taylor. "Wonderful! I like your poetry too but this was very good! " -- e. rocco caldwell. "a very funny story with a lot of real feeling and wit...nice job" -- k m. "WOW, this is more than i hoped for, well more than i expected is closer to it. when i put this up i had pretty much the same anxiety as last year when i had written and posted my first poetry and it's nice to get a favorable reaction. ERC if you'll duck i can give the girls that big old kiss and a hug. Thank you all." -- JAG. "I can just imagine you like that, haven't really changed have you." -- Steffe. Go Down Dead - The End by David B Doc Byron (1) "No way!!! I didn't see any of that coming! Doc, you are one creative SOB! I liked the way you posted this story in sections so a person would get hooked and have to keep reading. You are good, my friend! Now finish shape shifter will ya?" -- e. rocco caldwell. Go Down Dead Part Two by David B Doc Byron (3) "Awesome!!!!!!" -- KM. "I'm ready for more! This is getting very good! You are in your element, Doc!" -- e. rocco caldwell. "Bravo Doc... Once again you've managed to transport this city girl into a dusty, Godforsaken, zombie inhabited wasteland of thrills and chills. " -- D. G. Williford. Go Down Dead Part Three by David B Doc Byron (1) "Yes!!!!!!!! This is what writing is all about. The use of words to create visuals in the mind! The unexpected ending that keeps you wanting more! Excellent again, Doctor! You have graduated form simply Doc to Doctor!" -- e. rocco caldwell. Go Down Dead Part One by David B Doc Byron (2) "This is so good!!! I cant wait to read on..." -- KM (Michelle). "Doc, I have to admit I'm hooked on this story too! You have a way of creating visuals in the reader's mind. I actually can see what it is that you're writing. This is a very rare ability. Many writers can use description but few can create visual effects! " -- e. rocco caldwell. Go Down Dead Part Four by David B Doc Byron (1) "you got this story working, Doctor! This part was one of the best!" -- e. rocco caldwell. George by Janeth Garza (1) "i almost missed this, glad i didn't. sad tale told very well. if this was real, sorry for your loss." -- Just A Guy. Elegant Provisions by Harvey Kennett (3) "Harvey - nicely done. Love the "greet you, meet you, eat you" very clever." -- taylor, Canada. "I did a google for the vampire culinary institute - came up empty. guess eating all your customers cuts down on advertising dollars. had an image of some little guy running around on a plate at the top - good job." -- Just A Guy. "Many thanks for your kind words. I gotta rush. I'm popping our for a quick snack..." -- Harvey Kennett, Chelmsford, Essex, UK. Eating Babies by Harvey Kennett (2) "I found this really refreshing and very easy to follow, surprisingly! Certainly not a storyline I've encountered before. Not sure about the cutesy last sentence mind..." -- Rowan Davies. "what a wired dream he had or did will beast eat babies." -- Jeanette . Blues For Julia Foster by Brotherman (1) "Another fine piece of work, Brotherman. " -- e. rocco caldwell. Birthday Boy by Harvey Kennett (2) "I don't know quite how to put this. I liked the way the story was told but had just a bit of difficulty with the severity of the action for a missed b/d party. Probably a bit of niavity on my part or maybe that's what I liked about it. Nice to see another warped mind at work." -- Just A Guy. "Get some different names...auntie Jemima turned me off quickly! I found it though to read on but it did get better and I thought it was done well." -- e. rocco caldwell. Go to page: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 26 27 28 29 30 31 32 33 34 35 36 37 38 39 40 41 42 43 44 45 46 47 48 49 50 |
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