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Na Meray Dil Mein Malal Koye by Sadaf Shahab (3)
"Not sure what this says but I'm sure its lovely. Anyway you'd consider translating for me?" -- KM.
"adab i didnt 9 ther r asvel udru peoty asvel.as i gothrough som of urz its feels me pain coz i was not jus readin de shairs i was tryin 2 figured out wat acctually de feeling were whille writin such poem anywaz pata hae only those can feel de pain of lov who r also been victamized by this lov. i vel pray 4 u n u vel pray 4 mme " -- kazim, karachi, sind, pak.
"hey its kazim again its my y meesanger id so if u feel lik it than adup me hop talk u soon coz i m a victom of loov" -- skazimr2004, karachi.


Your Savior (Beleive) by Josh Anderson (2)
"GOOD POEM. You seem mature in your 16 years,thank goodness you have not given up searching for answers,keep writing.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Yeah, too damn mature sometimes, but its a god thing :) and thnx for the good review." -- Josh / AxeY.


You'll Never Know That by Charity B Baez (3)
"Forget about it! Get on with your life." -- Tony Soprano.
"Well, eventually i did get over it sweetie, i wrote that poem years ago, this is my first time displaying my work, so i pulled out some things from my past and my present. thanks for takin the time out to read it though." -- Charity, bronx, ny, us.
"Wow, thats excellent, and i know exactly how your feeling right now, so it is better for me reading it. Great work! Keep posting :)" -- Josh / Axey.


You Say Engel I Say Angel (Haiku Poem) by Josh Anderson (3)
"Now I'm addicted to your poems what am I going to do?shades of someone we care about?How about something for this season?happy please.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Thanx :), a bunch of love 2 u again! And yes, all my poetry and stories are about my experiences, my friends, me, feelings... so yeah it is. And no. I rarely do happy. I'll try but i just dont have that power behind it." -- Josh / AxeY.
"Bullshit you don't do happy Josh, I see it often mate, but other wise a brilliantly deep and insightful poem, mate. Peace" -- Hugh.


Would They Notice? by Josh Anderson (2)
"I know this sounds stupid but I almost envy you for the neglect they show in these situations, the �caring� and �help� I receive (that I don�t need or want) makes things so much harder for me, good poem anyways, but I need to talk to you :(" -- Rebecca.
"Man, i have lived with there stupid ignorance for so long it doesnt really bother me anymore. And hey chin up, it just shows that some people really are concerned and want to help (like me). In regards to talking, sure thing anytime u know that :), i have something to ask you as well." -- Josh / AxeY.


Winter's Song by Diana Venditti (4)
"LOVED IT ! Right up my alley. I love nature and planting. Beyond my creative endeavors it is my first love. I can appreciate winter for the living things must rest... but, the awakening of Springtime I really Love the best " -- Brion'.
"Hi Brion, glad you loked this one,I was getting a little worried with all the croaks, grunts, snaps etc.God bless D" -- Diana Venditti.
"No snaps and grunts to be cruel...only fooling' around. You have a gift and I like how you mix up the genres to fit your whims. I don't care for the Egyptology stuff, but respect your depiction of it. Bless you too!" -- Brion'.
"Hi Brion, thank you.xD" -- Diana Vendittit .


Will You by Diana Venditti (2)
"Very cute, and a very good moral. " -- Steven Howard.
"Hi Stephen, thank you for your critique,D" -- Diana Venditti.


Why? The Question Of My Life..... by Charity B Baez (6)
"Very true, I think most of us can relate to this one, I like the hope at the end, good work, oh and thank you heaps for your review :)" -- Rebecca.
"I like it, its different, if all were honest I think we have all felt like this sometimes,you had the courage to write it. welcome.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"well done....i feel your pain" -- km.
"i really think you should get over your fear of whatever it is thats holding you back from performing this piece...... i found it funny because i can relate to it and i found myself often asking the same question in similar situations......WHY?...... I think its a beautiful and appropriate piece of work" -- jay phife, ossining, new york, united states of america.
"The worst "WHY" is when, some one every close to you die, and the only word that one ever can think about it Why? The rest of the Whys that comes along in life is l personally believe when our minds are negative about things around us. A bit of advice - Think Positive and be happy and soon you will rid of all the Whys. Good poem based on Why. I came into your poem the title drew me in as my own Why was connect to death of near ones. I hope you understand my points of view and don't mind the comment." -- Amy, Hayes, UK.
"i don't mind ur view Amy....i totally understand where u are coming from....At the point when i wrote the poem...i didn't know what it was like to lose someone close to me...since then i question everyday WHY....especially since he took his own life.....understand that my work is written based on where my heart and mind is at that moment in time....new experiences bring on new views and angles in which i write....i'm trying to be a happy person....i'm trying to let go of the WHY's....but the more u lose....the more u gain....lol...but through it all...i'm still surviving! Thanks again for the feedback....." -- Charity, Bronx, NY, USA.


Who Will Get The Rats Out by Cassandra K Crews (4)
"Hi , first the title facinated me, after reading your poem I found it great,I write narrative,and this is a super poem,any more like this? keep writing.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"I too am annoyed at his carelessness. I will get your rats out rhymegirl." -- Ken B, Tulsa.
"Their should be more HUMEROUS POEMS" -- omer, Rawalpindi, Punjab, Pakistan.
"I like the pun in cheek of who will get the rats out now. Good write " -- Monte Mantle, Gresham , Oregon.


What I Want by Charity B Baez (1)
"I liked this one :) it was sweet, good work :)" -- Rebecca.


What Are Words? by Dri Cook (3)
"Chocolate is a word, it is sweet and I love it, and Dri, you are sweet..." -- Brion'.
"hey, that's cute! Thanks, Brian." -- Dri.
"Very true. Nice one Dri." -- kavya.


Welcome by Tessa (8)
"Very erotic but nice, you have courage,I would not dare.well done.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Thanks Diane! Courage... Um, it's more like a constant Craving to Spoon with him." -- Tessa.
"loved it and love the spooning thing too haha" -- km.
"KM- Glad you liked them!" -- Tessa.
"It's nice to see you back Tessa! You've been missed. This was very hot! You haven't lost your touch. Great job!" -- Gibb.
"What do you guys think of "TWO hearts beating" instead of what I have? And thank you Gibb, hopefully I'll be posting more..." -- Tessa.
"Tessa, I like it just the way it is and what a great ending! I loved the last four lines. Would love to see more from you." -- Gibb.
"Thanks Gibb, I'll leave as is." -- Tessa.


Walls And Words Of Pain by Josh Anderson (2)
"Beautiful josh, sad but with a hint of hope :)" -- Rebecca.
"Yeah, thanks. I try to keep hope up when things seem the grimmest, so this was a tribute to these fellings within me, and a tribute to those who have stuck by me." -- Josh / AxeY.


Unrest by Rae (1)
"a sad little rhyme...well told" -- km.


Translucence by Danielle (2)
"Great work :)" -- Rebecca.
"You've done it again, i just loved it." -- Josh / AxeY.


Too Strong A Word by Melonie M Brooks Hpf (1)
"Hi, sweet poem,D" -- Diana Venditti.


Thoughts Of A Fair Maid by Diana Venditti (6)
"so you're going into erotic poetry now!!! i like it, i love it, i want some more of it! its nice in a la-de-da, sing-song way. need more graphic details though!! sorry for my lack of reviews. am still down in bavaria right now but heading home tomorrow. keep on rhyming..." -- jersey mike, germany (now).
"Wow! I knew there was a reason why I liked you! " -- e. rocco caldwell.
"To my two favorite gentlemen, thank you kind sirs she said." -- Diana Venditti.
"visions of Frau Brucher?..."roll , roll, roll in za hay". I believe she was from bavaria too!" -- Brion'.
"Thank you Brion, it would have been nice to know if it amused you ?D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Yes, very much, and even without a horse "winney" sound!" -- Brion'.


The Rebirth Of Dawn by Diana Venditti (2)
"Egyptology takes a different tone under the guise of no names. It gets you to think of more contemporary times. " -- Brion'.
"Hi, Brion,sorry I must be getting thick in my old age, did not understand what you meant in the critique.D" -- Diana Venditti.


The Quest by Diana Venditti (2)
"I really like this one Diana - especially the last three stanzas. That's where your meaning really came together for me. I hope you continue to take you pen in hand." -- Steven Howard.
"Hi Steven, thank you for your critique.I will try to keep pen in hand for a bit longer.D" -- Diana Venditti.


The Presence by Diana Venditti (2)
"I realy can't criticize the flow and the words, but it seems like your trying too hard to make it so mysterious, that it becomes rambling, fragmented and almost convoluted. Poety doesn't always have to challenge the reader to be unique or good. " -- Richard.
"Hi Richard, thank you for taking the time to read it, sorry it was not up to your expectationsD" -- Diana Venditti.


The One Act Play by Melonie M Brooks Hpf (1)
"Another great read!!!Keep up the awesome job,Melanie." -- Brian L.


The Lost Garden by D G Williford (7)
"Beautiful...lovely!" -- km.
"Thanks KM... I thought you would appreciate this. By the way Atlanta, I'm only 2 hours north of you in Greenville. Small world huh?" -- Author.
"As usual a beautiful pieceD" -- Diana Venditti.
"Thanks D. My roots run deep in Carolina soil. " -- Author.
"Hi DG. iN Ode to autumn why edit first line? second .the the wold was not spelled incorrectly it was not world but wold.(wold:- an upland area of open country. concise English dictionary) LOL.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"DG Hi, still waiting for your comment on above, thank the Lord I did not hold my breath.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"FROM HERE TO ETERNITY??I NEVER GIVE UP, WELL MOST TIMES!D" -- Diana Venditti.


The Gypsy Dancer by Diana Venditti (3)
"you set you poems in the right mood and your imagination is great- l shall take time and read some more of your work - Amy." -- Amy, Hayes, Middlesex, Great Britain.
"Some small errors in spelling, but overall its great" -- jk.
"I can imagine that gypsey to be Esmerelda! Great adjectives!" -- Crissie.


The Great Cold Void by Josh Anderson (3)
"Well I am glad you wrote and released it (even though I wish you didn�t feel that way) great poem, very powerful and passionate and how could I forget, upsetting. Great work" -- Rebecca.
"Thnx becca, and i am gald i realesed them too. And i dont feel that may so much anymore, only sometimes." -- Josh / AxeY.
"Interesting Joshua, though well written, as always. Peace. " -- Hugh.


The Few Who Help (Against The Pain) by Josh Anderson (2)
"Sad but sweet, good poem :)" -- Rebecca.
"Thank you from the deepest region of my heart :)" -- Josh / AxeY.


The Encounter In The Forest by Diana Venditti (3)
"My exploration is daunted fleeting growing frightened of that Bogyman meeting" -- Brion'.
"Pardon?D" -- Diana Venditti.
"My trip in da woods is shortened by bein' scared 'o''da Bogyman...yo! (only wit' rhymes)...dig it?" -- Brion'.


The Child Who Was Once Within Her by Steven L Howard (9)
"This is really different for me. I am not a poet, but I could not express this adequately in prose. I do not even know what type of verse you would call this - I didn't try to make it rhyme, but it does in spots. I'm putting this out and asking for critique from all the accomplished poets on the site." -- Steven L. Howard.
"Hi , the story is wonderful, would like to see a bit less repitition, you have a wonderful way of making people understand just what it is all about.keep writingD" -- Diana Venditti.
""Thank you Diana. This is the kind of feedback I was hoping for (And am hoping for from others as well if they want to comment). As I said, I am not a poet. I have repetition on several different levels so I need you to help me see which ones you think I have over-done (Or if all are over-done)." -- Steven L. Howard.
"Hi Seven, I know how hard it is to find different words meaning the same thing,I get rapped over the nuckles when I do it, Take sought,you could use search on one line "In her loneliness for true love she would search" play with it ,it will send you grey sometimes, send me if you wish your e.mail address, I will sent you a couple of things that might help.In poetry many time we shorten lines still keeping the sense.You will get there, after a few grey hairs it comes, At the moment I am writing in poetry form the Scarlet Pimpernel, for the first time I find it does not come quickly,hair has gone from grey to white.LOL D " -- Diana Venditti.
"Thank you Diana. I had thought that paralleling by using the same words brought out the contrast more clearly in the contrasting lines - That's why I need the critique from those like you. I'm going to save this back, and working on the synonyms and see if I can keep the contrast in the sets of two lines." -- Steven L. Howard.
"Revised it Diana. I was not happy with any other wording for the exchange, however. It must emphasize an exchange from one loving person to another. I couldn't find another way that I liked as much as just repeating the same words to emphasize the same love. I think the same love is key in that comparison/contrast." -- Steven Howard.
"Hi poetry is always very personal, and you are probably right, It was just when I repeated in earlier days I got my knuckles rapped so it has become nearly a fixation to avoid when ever poss,but things might have changed since then, love it anyway it says it all so clearly. have copied e.mail so ok I will send test now.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"I am certainly not a poetry expert, but your poem beautiful expresses many of the aspects of adoption that we have experienced. Its lovely." -- Julie Pool, Cleveland, OK.
"it is touching. To me, what matters is what comes from the heart, if it makes sense, that's ok, and this one does make sense, it is beautiful, Steve, keep it up." -- Dri.


The Butterfly by Ramkumar Menon (3)
"Hi, such a sweet poem from a senitive young man.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Ramkumar: I liked you when you were nine, and your mind was on butterflies. Your photo with the mountains shows that you have grown up but can you keep the simplicity, yeh wonder, of the child in the universe. Please do! " -- don rider.
"Such a sweet and innocent poem; perfect for such a sweet and innocent smile. Well done. " -- Soudamini Nath, Murrieta, CA, USA.


The Art Of Survival by Diana Venditti (3)
"not only to survive, but especially to relate is an art. I like this one. " -- Dri.
"Hi Dri, thank you, It was written for a friend.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"I figured." -- Dri.


That Bed by Rae (1)
"sad but well written..." -- km.


Tempest by Diana Venditti (3)
"beautifully done" -- km.
"An excellent bouny of God's wonder divinely put. Please read my "Freedom Ride"." -- Brion'.
"Hi KM and Brion ,thank you for your critiques,D" -- Diana Venditti.


Take Me To The South by D G Williford (3)
"Very beautiful,I can see you are a southern belle. Grace and honour long forgotten mores the pity.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Wonderful Deb! I'm in Atl .....where are you?" -- km.
"God bless the south and southern women. nice dreamy piece." -- curious.


Submerge by Tessa (5)
"I think I may cut out the last two lines? Please review and let me know what you think. Thanks!" -- Tessa.
"Tessa, what's here is really good, but it seems to stop short. Perhaps that is just because I know there may have been two more lines to it." -- Gibb.
"Yeah, trying to capture something I felt last year..." -- Tess.
"Because Cheryl says, the last 2 lines have been deleted." -- Tessa.
"I like it even better this way. " -- Gibb.


Strangulation by Mike Axe (1)
"WTF? Harsh, but i suppose you get a strong image of pain and anger, thats portrayed very well." -- Josh / AxeY.


Spring Song by Diana Venditti (3)
"I am abound with a vigorous twitter in my imagination, as I anticipate the days of spring when I can see the season of Spring stretching out her arms and shake off the Winter's chill, watching mmmmmmmmmm...RASPBERRIES grow!" -- Brian O Neil.
"Dear Raspberry man,well did it take you to spring?you are so ivasive.God bless D" -- Diana Venditti.
"ya mean ya can't see me bounding with a vigorous twitter... skipping and flailing down a country path lined with daffodils? You would love to have me in your classroom...I would make your day. Actually you would probably roll your eyes a lot (like my wife) saying "oh brother". I get a kick out of life and have fun with it; and yes you took me to Spring. "I can visualize the new green shoots from the raspberry bushes emerging from the cool early Spring ground as we speek"! God bless you too!" -- Brion'.


Spirit Catcher At Work by Ian Tronco (1)
"Hi, nice piece, D" -- Diana Venditti.


Soul To Soul by Josh Anderson (5)
"You and Katy are very good writers, this poem is really really really good, I loved it, it had a great ending" -- Amber.
"Thanks :D" -- Josh / AxeY.
"oh and btw i was katy's friend she spoke about in the email she sent you" -- Amber.
"Very Nice... Good Job! Mwahhhh" -- Jess.
"Thnx Jess :)" -- Josh / AxeY.


Soul Song by Diana Venditti (2)
"Fantastic!! I love it! That's all I can say: I love it!" -- Steven Howard.
"Hi Steven , this is one of my 10 min poems it just comes and I write like mad,I felt it. thank youD" -- Diana Venditti.


Something Slithers by Diana Venditti (12)
"Fantastic" -- riley.
"Hi Riley, thank you, This is a bit different to my usual.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"I don't know whether it was intentional or not, but I thought it was interesting that the first two words are separated and not contracted into "something". It would be correct whether it were to read "some thing" or "something", but making it "some thing" gives far more emphasis to the word "thing" and thus giving a better visual of this "thing". A good job in using words effectively." -- Jerry St. George.
"Hi Jerry, thank you, yes it was intended as two seperate words, I felt it would as you said put emphasis.guess what gave me the idea?D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Beautiful D, it is a little different to usual but it is great, but then again all your work is :) " -- rebecca.
"Hi Rebecca, thank you, guess who is the angel with a broken wing.D" -- Diana Vendittit.
":) Thank you D" -- Rrbecca.
"good one, i like it" -- km.
"Very nice, Diana. Your work always is." -- Steven L. Howard.
"Hi, Thank you all, it's funny what comes into ones mind at 6 in the morning ,drinking coffee with a new abandoned kitten that is trying so hard to say, hey I'm here , and I am now one of the family, he is Mihos.thank you all very much.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Ps . Mihos has his moment in And now I dream,he is special, is afraid of nothing, nose to nose with the dogs from the first moment,Sounds strange but his courage has given me courage,right little pest as well.D" -- Diana Vendittit.
"Beautiful words Diana...I love the flow of your poems, your use of words and the lovely rhymes. A joyful read." -- Olutayo K Osunsan , Kampala, Kampala, Uganda.


So Am I by Mike Axe (1)
"Great poem :)" -- Rebecca Tantos.


Slow Dance by Dri Cook (6)
"It's nice to enjoy the gifts and the splndor of Gods boutiful beauty, without the delight of him, we have nothing. Good job! " -- Brion'.
"Nice, another great picture of a great day. 2 things though, one I thought the phrase howling wind sounded awkward, i think because it's usually associated with storms. Also I think there's a few typos but those are just small things. On the whole, it's a good piece, nice work." -- kavya.
"thanks, Kavya but I really do hear the wind howling because I live in a highrise. But I made a change now. What would you suggest?" -- Dri.
"delightful is nice, perhaps you could use the word cheerful too. they just alot more in keeping with the rest of the poem." -- kavya.
"Hi Dri, I like this poem, two things puzzled me, Which I am sure oyu will explain .One ,trees dresses in orange,in spring? two I go to the mirrow, comb my hair and fall in love again? with who?yourself?as you were looking in the mirror, I am not being nasty ,just trying to understand the poem.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"yes, Diana, in my country, some trees do get orange color in Spring time and it is very very beautiful, and as for the other doubt that you have, I fall in love with myself again, of course, it's implied, since I am looking at the mirror." -- Dri.


Sightings Of Love by Josh Anderson (2)
"Good poem, by the way it comes when you least expect it.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Yeah, i know, thnx :)" -- Josh / AxeY.


Shadow World by Josh Anderson (2)
"Beautiful, still sad, but beautiful at the same time, i liked it :)" -- Rebecca.
"Thanks muchly :)" -- Josh / AxeY.


Self Punishment by Josh Anderson (4)
"very beautiful D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Thnx D. :) thank you alot." -- Josh / AxeY.
"Yes very good poem, i agree with D" -- riley.
"Thnx riley :)" -- Josh / AxeY.


Sarah (Haiku Poem) by Josh Anderson (2)
"Hi, You sound a lovely guy who loves his friends,D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Yeah, my friends are what i live for. They meen the world to me." -- Josh / AxeY.


Re-Education Camp Siberia by Diana Venditti (2)
"Nice as usual Diana. I like that it ends with some hope, but a mysterious hope. Should the word in the first line be "frozen"? Nice piece of work." -- Steven L. Howard.
"Hi Steve, yes I goofed as usual, thank you for the critique.D" -- Diana Venditti.


Rebecca (Haiku Poem) by Josh Anderson (9)
"Hi, you have got me crying in my coffee,its such a sweet thought,You see Rebecca a lot of us care about you.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Dont worry i was crying in my own coffee writing these (in frustration and love)" -- Josh / AxeY.
"Thank you Josh :)you�re too sweet, if only it was all true, and thank you Diana :) I know there are so many who care if only it were to someone more deserving, but thank you both so much!" -- Rebecca.
"Oh dear rebecca, what you dont realise is that its all true :). You deserve it so much too ;)" -- Josh / AxeY.
"Oh so u actually know our rebecca? or is it just through this site? a good poem, keep writing" -- riley.
"Yeah, i do... but not all that well. And thanks!" -- Josh / AxeY.
"Amazing, she must be some girl for everyone to be writting aobut her, but great poem" -- Rashma.
"Thnx Rashma, she is. A special kinda person." -- Josh / AxeY.
"I think this is a wonderful tribute to a beautiful person. I only know Rebecca through this site and through emails but just from what she writes to me I feel that I have a true and great friend.She is a talented poet and I know I'll be good friends with her for the rest of my life." -- David D.


Rebecca And Christmas by Diana Venditti (1)
"Thank you so much Diana, you're so sweet :)I loved it, thank you so much! :) thank you" -- Rebecca.


Reasons... by Josh Anderson (2)
"Poignant but good, like all your work�I hope those last stanza doesn�t hold any truth�Remember I am here if you need to talk josh" -- Rebecca.
"Yeah it does manage to get its point across. And well it doesnt at the moment, :) and thnx" -- Josh / AxeY.


Puppet On Strings by Dri Cook (1)
"That will be a welcomed moment when you can free yourself from bondage and write with the rest of your emotions. I know your creativity and imagination will be limitless and will soar higher than high." -- Brion'.


One Sweet Kiss by Diana Venditti (2)
"that's beautiful!!! This is the type poem that I really enjoy." -- Dri.
"Hello Dri, Glad you liked it.D" -- Diana Venditti.


On Mathematicians by Higgins (6)
"In Karl Pearson applied Statistics to the field of Biometrics "Statistics to the field" only has 6 sylables." -- matt kimball.
"Matt---thanks for finding the error in the Karl Pearson entry" -- Higgins.
"Hi Higgins, this will go over the top of their heads, and those who want to feel big will write stupid comments like that above,keep it up , lOVE IT.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"not very nice Diana, but typical." -- follower.
":) I've always wondered where the term "studentized" came from when dealing with t tests. Somehow, that little tidbit of information escaped being taught in the course of my engineering education." -- Steven Howard.
"Steven---Student's real name was William Gosset. He obtained his first vocational position at the Guiness Brewery in Dublin. Because of the influence of lawyers at that time, Gosset found it necessary to publish his research under a pseudonym, and he chose "Student."" -- Higgins.


Ode To Autumn by Diana Venditti (2)
"a very pretty picture you've painted. might want to edit the first line. and world is misspelled in the last stanza. otherwise a lovely piece as ususal. " -- km.
"Hi km , first thank you, second why edit first line?This line grammaticle is accepted in poetry,ie<:-I grey mountains see.second wold is not intended as world but as wold, ie:- an upland area of open country. (Concise english dictionary)LOL.D. " -- Diana Venditti.


Not So Simply Stated by Kathrine Knickrehm (1)
"very nice with lots of emotion" -- km.


My Red, White, And Blue by Melonie M Brooks Hpf (2)
"Melonie. Thank you for this. This vet appreciates your patriotic spirit. :)" -- Steven Howard.
"A valiant attempt, but quite immature. Noone should ever hold a loaded weapon in their hands unless they intend to use it. If every soldier felt this way, there'd be a lot of dead Americans." -- Anonymous.


My Knives Cold Caress by Josh Anderson (2)
"Is there something your not telling me :(" -- Rebecca.
"No, im telling all, these were just of a way i felt once, but i still do wonder, as the last stanza states. Thanks for reviewing these though :), trust me, if i wanted to be dead, i would be. Thank you for your concern." -- Josh / AxeY.


My Guardian Angel by Melonie M Brooks Hpf (1)
"Great job,Melonie nice piece." -- Brian L.


My Creamy Venetian Blinds by Ian Tronco (1)
"wonderful..." -- km.


Missunderstood by Josh Anderson (2)
"very good poem and so true, but not only for a teenager.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Yeah true. thnx D" -- Josh / AxeY.


Masterpiece by Dri Cook (5)
"A wondrful prayer. We are in awe, but thankful and free of doubt." -- Brion'.
"very moving good and you are cute tinker bell" -- vernon, bedford, usa, tx.
"thank you both, Brian and Vernon - well, cute?? Thanks also for that." -- Dri.
"I've read several of your offerings and must admit there are many things to like. I am however, suprised by the number of your submissions. (well over 100) I have always been more impressed by quality rather than quantity. Prolific writing is a diffcult task to say the least and when I see mass production such as yours, I can't help relating to the image of a promising race horse, who, when running in a marathon race, gets out of the gate and maintains a blazing pace for half the race, only to run out of gas at the top of the homestretch and finish the race well behind the other horses. Burn out is a constant danger to all writers. There are many young writers who flood this site with submissions, mostly poor efforts, who will praise your work and say that I am always overly critical and cynical. Anyone can write but good writing does not come easy. " -- Richard.
"Thank you, Richard. Well, actually, the horse is not very much worried if it will run out of gas or if it will win the race. My goal is to share my experiences, good and not so good, to reach people out, to be like a cute lighthouse and somehow, to make a difference on Earth. I really don't think you are being cynical and critical. You're just being honest and for that I thank you. I do agree that quality is much better than quantity. But the thing is that when I started writing I was trying to release and I just would write the thoughts down, was not worried if - as I said - the horse would win the race or not. Time will tell, yes? I think that slowing down comes with time, it depends on the events in our lives and as I said, only time will tell what lies ahead. You take care and thanks again for leaving feedback and for enjoying my work. " -- Dri.


Luke (Haiku Poem) by Josh Anderson (3)
"Luke sounds like a really great sexy guy... but then there was a poem about him." -- Someone.
"Yes..." -- Rogert Ramton.
"If thats you luke and paul, your balls are mine biatches, your going down!! If not, then my appologies, i am unsure what to say to you people, except that this is kinda a wierd situation.... LOL." -- Josh / AxeY.


Love With Respect by Amarjit Bhambra (4)
"Very sweet :)good work" -- Rebecca.
"agreed.. very sweet poem, good work :-) " -- baker.
"Hi Rebecca and Baker, thanks for reading. If one has respect than you have everything. (that is what l believe) Respect to you all. Love Amy. " -- Amy , Hayes, England.
"As from todays date 13th Feb 2006, Please view BBC news where there are looking at 4 famailies regarding Respect one of which is a sikh family (l am a sikh too). " -- Amy, Hayes, England.


Love Is by Diana Venditti (4)
"Nice. We can all never have or give enough." -- Steven L. Howard.
"BRAVO...it is what we live for." -- Brion'.
"Thats beautiful, so sweet *tears*. And i agree with the noth of you, brion an steven." -- Josh / AxeY.
"Hi, Thank you all,Steve,Brion,and Josh." -- Diana Venditti.


Life (Haiku Poem) by Josh Anderson (2)
"Hi, my fingers are wearing out, never have I reviewed so many poems of one person in sutch a short time. you have only taken the first step on the road, and boy have you got a lot of living to do,so live it to the full,follow your heart,plenty of time to think of death LATER. D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Yeah, i know i have much to do (miles to go before i sleep), but death just seems to confront me, so i may as well try to face it now instead of shunting it aside for later. And i appreciate your concern and reviews so much. Love 2 U! :)" -- Josh / AxeY.


Joshua (Haiku Poem) by Josh Anderson (2)
"Hi , just one line I DONT LIKE . THE FIRST. You are not a joke, you are warm and caring and that is one big gift you have. keep writing D" -- Diana Venditti.
"See there are three meanings to that line. That i think im a joke and that i am a joker at heart. Not to mention to josh someone is to joke them around. But yeah, i know. Thanks :), and ill keep on tryin." -- Josh / AxeY.


Jessie (Haiku Poem) by Josh Anderson (2)
"Hi Josh, I know how you feel, pretty poem ,few words that say it all.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Yeah, thnx :)" -- Josh / AxeY.


In Love by Dri Cook (3)
"Yup ME TOO ! gOOD JOB IN SAYING IT FOR US ALL." -- Brion'.
"Very nice. Very well said. " -- Steve.
"thank you both, Brion and Steve. He deserves so much more than that..." -- Dri.


Im Not Afraid by Josh Anderson (2)
":( :( :( :( :( thats all i can say" -- Rebecca.
"mmm... yeah sorry, but it was at least well written?" -- Josh / AxeY.


I'm Home by Dri Cook (3)
"Hello Dri. This is very, very nice, and so true. Love it. " -- Steven L. Howard.
"Peace has come." -- Brion'.
"thank you Brian and Steve. Yes, peace has come. MERRY CHRISTMAS, guys!" -- Dri.


If I Could Go Back In Time by Dri Cook (5)
"I would like to go back and tell this little girl-its not your fault-God loves you. Very good images of memories re-visted " -- vernon, Bedford, tx.
"that little girl has grown into a fine woman of God...now it's time for that little girl to be tucked safely away into the archival trunk where she will lye in quiet rest, to only be looked in on for the sake of occasional nostalgia." -- Brion'.
"Beautiful poem, and if only we could go back, but then we wouldn't be the same people who learn and grow from our pains. I loved it" -- Rebecca.
"You are right, we wouldn't learn, but we would be able to see things in a more positive way because it is not the hurt, understand? I too was tremendously heart when a child, and this brought a lot of pain when I grew up. But I want you to know that it is our INNER ATTITUDE towards life now that helps us to see things in a positive way and to change the bad into good. And of course, a lot of therapy and will power is required. But much more than that, to believe that there is Someone greater than us who truly loves us, no matter if the world hates us. Good luck, Rebecca. Glad you enjoy my work." -- Dri.
"thank you both for the review on this one. Merry Christmas and a very Happy New Year." -- Dri.


I Hate Ya! by Roberto J Moreno (2)
"Well, its sweet, but tainted. Like a sour warhead... neway, well done, im still not sure what to make of it though. You love her so much that you hate her???" -- Josh / AxeY.
"this has the potential to be really good, but there are lots of typos...work on that and i think u got a winner" -- km.


I Dreamed Of You by Dri Cook (1)
"We always have that hope in Him, Dri. Very nice work." -- Steven L. Howard.


Hope's Golden Thread by Diana Venditti (2)
"Thank you so much Diana :) that was beautiful and you don't know how much it means to me, thank you :):)" -- Rebecca.
"God bless you little un if you need me, I'm hereD" -- Diana Venditti.


Hope And The Warrior by Diana Venditti (1)
"A nice echo Of Billy Shakespear.Wonderful pictures." -- Brion'.


Hold My Hand by Josh Anderson (2)
"Hi Josh, loved it, just one thing did not understand, big Pink eyes?you have got a bad dose of luv bug.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Thank you ever so dearly :), and the pink eyes thing is because, well its not every day that u see someone with pink eyes. Besides love and pink go together, erhem... And i saw the doc, he says the bugs are like fleas... lol I have a collar now, lol Thank you very much :)" -- Josh / AxeY.


Hate (Haiku Poem) by Josh Anderson (3)
"Very true, but one h.. of a waste of enegy,not good for the heart either, like the way you used cloud,storm clouds that reck a sunny day.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Yeah, :) and oh i know what it does. its a horrible thing." -- Josh / AxeY.
"Love, Haiku's, this one, sweet and simple - nice one." -- Amy, London, UK.


Hate Becomes Us by Adam Wieland (1)
"Great, powerful poem there, good work :)" -- Rebecca Tantos.


Happy Christmas To All On Storymania by Diana Venditti (4)
"Merry Christmas Diana. I wish you all the same things, but cannot say them so poetically. :) " -- Steven Howard.
"Merry Christmas to you too :) and like Steven said al that same but I cannot write it as well as you. You have a talent, you can write about any topic and it is always great :):)" -- Rebecca.
"Hi,teven, you have great talent , wait and see you just wear those laurels.D Hi, Rebecca, you have a lot of talent, one day someone will note it, I hope next year will be special and happy for you.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Merry christmas, also to you Diana. And thankyou for your reviews :). Have a happy and safe new year, as should everyone else, Merry Christmas" -- Josh / AxeY.


Fractured Core by Josh Anderson (2)
"Nice poem is it about anyone or just made up? love is a strong emotion that can leave us confused so it was possible you felt both" -- riley.
"Well, yeah it is about me, love was a strong feeling, and still is, thnx for the review." -- Josh / AxeY.


For Now.... by Charity B Baez (1)
"It's common that we love the ones who aren't good for us, and the ones we shouldnt, but that whats makes love special :) anyways great poem " -- Rebecca.


Flying Strong by Josh Anderson (2)
"You have talent my young friend, dont stop now.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Thnx D, rage and hurt can make you very powerful in so many ways, as can love and thats where i draw my inspiration from. :)" -- Josh / AxeY.


Failures Defeat by Josh Anderson (3)
"Hi... you are young but thoughts are matured. very good poem. You can read my 13 stories by searching authors - Partha Pratim. Last one where God is the hero......" -- Partha Pratim Majumder, Kolkata, India.
"Great poem but you know how i feel on the subject :(" -- Rebecca.
"Thanks rebecca and Partha. Im not sure what u mean Partha. And yeah i know how you feel on the subject, but you know how i feel on it as well..." -- Josh / AxeY.


Evan (Haiku Poem) by Josh Anderson (2)
"HOW ABSOLUTLY ACCURATE, RIGHT ON CUE. DING DING." -- Hugh.
"AWWW... NO TEN POINTS????? HAHA thanks :)" -- Josh / AxeY.


Endless Skies by Josh Anderson (3)
"I think everyone wants someone like that, and I am sure we will find them in time, again great poem :)" -- Rebecca.
"I like this very much, seems you and Rebbeca are soul mates,maybe you should get together,who knows after you might find you are good for each other and find a little happiness, good luck.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Thnx bec, thnx D, *blush* yeah maybe D, maybe." -- Josh / Axey.


Earthquake by Diana Venditti (2)
"Another good personification. Stamping her foot...I can see that. :) You really have a way of illustrating almost musically. I enjoy your work a lot." -- Steven L. Howard.
"Hi Steve. thank you, I must admit I feel more at home with rhymn, free verse I find more difficult.D" -- Diana Venditti.


Drowning (Sweep Me Away) by Josh Anderson (2)
"Josh, My forte is definitely not poetry, but I hate to see you deny your poems the chance to be read by putting things like "not very good" in your descriptions. I can point out that you have a misspelling in the first (The) and 17th (hold) lines. Beyond that, I hope that the poets on the site will give you some constructive feedback, but in order to get that from them, you need to invite them to read your work. Descriptions like "not very good" usually invite people to pass over your work instead of read it. Be confident, and let them read it. If they have constructive criticism then learn from it, but it all starts with encouraging them to actually read it. Keep writing. :)" -- Steven Howard.
"Yeah, i know thanks man :). I was pretty tired and shitted off when i posted it (it was like 4:00am and i was loosing at UT against mates when i gave up and posted some stuff i had) But thanks very true and it wont happen again :)." -- Josh / AxeY.


Decay Or Life by Josh Anderson (3)
"How well i can relate to not only this one but alot of them, and believe me thats not a good thing lol, hope everything is okay :( u can talk whenever okay!!" -- Rebecca.
"Thnx for the good review, and yeah i know thanx." -- Josh / AxeY.
"And same 2 u, u know that." -- Josh / AxeY.


Death (Haiku Poem) by Josh Anderson (3)
"Hi Josh,Its just moving on,Hey! you are a bit young to be thinking of this, look around,anyway I want to read your poems for a long time yet, you hear me young man?D" -- Diana Venditti.
"Its just a part of my mind, i try to expore every avenue, thnx anyway. Besides, i cant leave not now. Not yet. I still have a few reasons. :), im fine, just dark." -- Josh / AxeY.
""harming your time" You have used deep words of the moment of death how it is harming ones time. Not a nice subject but very good poem." -- Amy, London, UK.


Day By Day by Melonie M Brooks Hpf (1)
"Great piece!!!I only wish I would've found this site sooner your a good writer." -- Brian L.


Dark Vast Burn by Josh Anderson (2)
"Like you said they are dark but I don't know why you aren�t sure of them, they are great (but of course you know my love of dark things) anyways good work, but I really do hope all is okay :(" -- Rebecca.
"Yeah, they are good, i just dont wanna upset anyone. And yeah im ok." -- Josh / AxeY.


Dance Of The Sandstorm by Diana Venditti (2)
"I love the personification. I've never thought of a sandstorm dancing, breathing surveying, whispering, or giving. Very nice imagery. You took something I always viewed as austere, and gave it a serenity I would never have thought of." -- Steven L. Howard.
"Hi Steve, Thank you for a super critique, I love the wind especially this desert wind, its quite fantastic to see, it seems to dance,D" -- Diana Venditti.


Counting Codes (Compulsion) by Josh Anderson (2)
"As I read that, I was at the edge of my seat, tensed and waiting for the next line. Brilliant job." -- Desi.
"Thanks :) " -- Josh / AxeY.


Chaos And Peace by Josh Anderson (2)
"Which one will you choose Josh? Great poem :)" -- Rebecca.
"Thnx bec, btw i think i will choose chaos, i like a dangerous challenge." -- Josh / AxeY.


Brittney (Haiku Poem) by Josh Anderson (2)
"Anyone ever tell you , you have caught the love bug.love it.D" -- Diana Venditti.
"*blushes like girl* Yeah, but im not always like this. Thnx :)" -- Josh / AxeY.


Bloom In The Crazy World by Tri Tran (2)
"This is a very nice poem. The words are so colorful and jump out at you. I enjoyed this poem very much." -- Nancy Rider.
"someone claims this poem is his and its mine" -- tri tran, huntington beach, ca, usa.


Baby Baby by Danielle (3)
"I really liked this one, especially for 2 minutes..." -- Rebecca.
"Thanks! Usually ideas just pop into my head out of nowhere, like that one." -- Danielle.
"Once agian, u amaze me. I loved this piece very much. Keep up your great work." -- Josh / AxeY.


B B C by E Rocco Caldwell (8)
"hehe that was spot on mate!" -- km.
"Thanks, KM. I just love the BBC!" -- e. rocco caldwell.
"some great shows but way too anti-american for my taste which i guess makes it right up your alley huh?" -- curious.
"Here's a clue....life in this world isn't always about America! Anti-American isn't what the BBC is...it's giving a different point of view that isn't filtered through the American media...I like various different perspectives in order to get the whole perspective!" -- e. rocco caldwell.
"I'd have to agree with "Curous." I'm not impressed by different perspectives per se' no matter how entertaining you may find them. I'm only interested in the truth. If all news stories were reported objectively, accurately, and completely, There would be no need for different perspectives. We would all know the truth. However, BBC AND the major American networks rarely tell us the whole truth. They in fact, edit the truth before reporting it. They love to report bad news and news that makes America look bad. Most of the people in this country were smart enough to figure this out, which is part of the reason the liberals lost the election. " -- Richard.
"Richard, get a life! This is a poem...nothing else...I did it in 10 meter and it was suppose to be a funny piece...you are way too serious...sound like me you're working for the GOP! you need to simplify, man!!!! Get off all that and enjoy poeple and things as they are...no sweat...no attempt to pollute your beliefs...heck! I can care less about what you believe! Take a breath...relax...that's it...now take another breath...there! Isn't that better?" -- e. rocco caldwell.
"Well my dear chap I would say absolutly spiffing,jolly hockysticks and all that.keep them coming and rule Britannia.D" -- diana venditti.
"three cheers for the mighty Brits, without them we couldn't do they keep the Irish blood still flowing with the orange crew. I did like your tongue in cheek piece on the BBC though. " -- Brion'.


Anywhere But There... by Josh Anderson (2)
"I can relate to that poem, it's really grabbing" -- Carmen.
"When I read this poem it reminds me of a horror movie that I saw many years ago called 'the fog.' The remake is out now. I don't know if a horror movie is what you wanted this poem to project but this is how I interpret this piece." -- David D.


Anger And Pain (Haiku Poem) by Josh Anderson (2)
"Again I am enjoying how unique your poetry is and this one isn't as abstract as your other writings. It is clearly about a person who struggles in life and finds it hard to make it through each day.I too am a fan of the Haiku though I rarely write any, as I stated before I basically stick to one form of poetry.Just out of curiousity are you sure you know what a Haiku is? I don't mean to test your intelligence because you're obviously a smart and bright young man.But I Haiku is a Japanese poem consisting of three unrhymed lines containing 5,7,5 respective syllables totaling 17 syllables in the whole poem.So from that perspective the above poem wouldn't be considered a Haiku.But then again maybe it's done differently in Australia.But in any case I thought it was a good poem." -- David D.
"No, your dead right. They all are not Haiku, they are acrostic poems. I buggered up lol. Thanks for the review" -- Josh / AxeY.


Angels Might by Diana Venditti (2)
"WONDERFULLY DONE, BUT SAD THAT YOU HAD TO WRITE THE HORRIFIC TRUTH. Man just doesn't know when it has a good thing, we screw it up every time...GREED." -- Brion'.
"Hi Brion, man will never learn until it is too late. thank .-�you for your critique. God bless D.-." -- Diana Venditti.


And I Dream by Diana Venditti (5)
"what a beautiful picture you paint....very well done :)" -- km.
"Hope - I hear it in this poem. Very nice Rebecca, and very nicely done." -- Steven L. Howard.
"Diana, I apologize for the mistake in identity in my review above. I guess I wasn't pointed quite where I thought when I clicked. The review still stands - just with a different identity. It is very nicely done." -- Steven L. Howard.
"Wow! Diana, that is absolutely beautiful, such great imagery. Very well done ;)" -- Josh / AxeY.
"Hi, Thank you all for your critiques.We all have the same dreams,D" -- Diana Venditti.


An Ordinary Day by Diana Venditti (2)
"Without all of that, you wouldn't have this." -- Brion'.
"Hi Brion, thank you but not quite sure what you meant? all what do I have?." -- Diana Venditti.


An In-Paradox by Josh Anderson (2)
"As I continue to read your work,Josh,I've been noticing that you write a lot of abstract poetry.Which is cool if that's your style.But that's not the case with me.When I write a poem I want it to be perfectly clear to the reader what message I'm trying to portray.Your poetry is unique and that is a great thing.You also express your poetry in many different ways which means your very versatile.I'm enjoying your work very much however with this particular piece I don't know what message you are trying to portray.But maybe that was your goal because some abstract poets want the meaning of the poetry to be understood by only themselves.Or they want a reader to come up with their own interpretation. " -- David D.
"This poem is purely the brain-child of confusion and contemplation. To me it has a meaning, but the design was for the readers to pull their own from the piece. Thanks for the compliment on my abstract style" -- Josh / AxeY.


Ambition And Destruction by Josh Anderson (2)
"A good poem but I don't see to much desruction in the lines except for 'destroyed against you first dismay' and I'm not sure what that means.I continue to see how your poetry takes on many forms and I'm very impressed." -- David D.
"Yes, your right. The title does not quite corespond with the matter of the poem." -- Josh / AxeY.


Alone Is ... by Veronica H (2)
"Veronica, I see a great deal of potential in your writing. I would suggest that you go through and spell out the e-mail short hand you have used in a few places. For example, use "you" instead of "u" and "with" instead of "wit". This is a very nice piece, and I see a lot of creative potential in you as I read this. I hope you will continue to write." -- Franklin.
"Total agreeance. Please try not to use leet or short hand. But your work is beautiful, captivating, please keep it up." -- Josh / Axey.


Aaron (Haiku Poem) by Josh Anderson (4)
"Maybe something about cars and world dominations perhaps, nah just kidding mate, peace." -- Hugh.
"In total agreeance HEHE, total agreeance. But dont forget the organ farms that he has devised! LOL wacko kid, wacko kid indeed." -- Josh / AxeY.
"Sounds like Aaron tells it like it is.Is that a good thing or bad thing about him? Just wondering." -- David D.
"It's a great thing about him. Keep's him real :)" -- Josh / AxeY.


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