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Infidelity by R Bennett Okerstrom (37)
"i love your poetry.it's a great job and full of honesty :)" -- Lizzy bryan, Chicago.
"Right fuckin' on, man." -- jkpayson.
"A subject I know all too well. Excellnt work. You are incredibly talented! " -- JM.
"While the lonely man fails to understand... You've shown a bit of depth here, perhaps your hyper-masculinity IS surmountable." -- olef .
"Hyper-masculinity huh? " -- R. Bennett.
"Full of honesty, but hopefully not personal experience. Some of this is pretty dark. ;-)" -- Mistina, Memphis, TN, USA.
"Shouldn't that read, "Mistina, NYC, NY" by now? This poem is meant to be from the married woman's perspective, not from mine. I'm not a married woman (I don't think) :-)" -- R. Bennett.
"Referring to the overall dark body. Not this poem in particular." -- Mistina.
"There is always light to balance the darkness! Remember this: "Keep your face to the sunshine and you will never see the shadows."" -- R. Bennett.
"In my situation it was my husband that cheated, but your words truly helped me find acceptance, forgiveness and peace. Now I can finally see the sunshine. Thank you!" -- JM.
"That is incredibly neat that a poem would have that effect on you. The finest compliment a writer can receive." -- Mistina.
"BTW, R. Bennett--You know that some of us prefer the shadows." -- Mistina.
"I am one of them." -- R. Bennett.
"I'll take the sunshine anyday. Thanks for pointing the way." -- JM.
"Often times the man can be blind. He should see this coming." -- P. Stewart.
"You are correct. But some men can't see it coming because they are too engulfed in themselves and not their significant other." -- R. Bennett.
"Spoken like a true romantic" -- Meghan, Atlanta, Georgia.
"At times." -- R. Bennett.
"Just remember there are two sides to every story." -- JM.
"I'm not sure what you are referring to JM. " -- R. Bennett.
"Just the perspective of a married woman who was cheated on. Being cheated on was the most painful experience of my life. Building the bridge to get over it took a long time, but I have some very special people in my life today because I was able to do that. Blaming the other person just delayed the healing process. As I stated before, reading this poem actually helped me to understand and stop blaming. I don't know if that makes any sense or not." -- JM.
"I understand what you are saying now." -- R. Bennett.
"No...we do not understand...ever" -- mattie, va.
"When it comes to infidelity it is usually harder to understand why two people are even together if one or both stray. Convenience? For the kids? Adventure? ????" -- R. Bennett.
"Fear kept me in my marriage, R. Bennett. I was afraid of being alone, afaid I wouldn't be able to survive without him. Pretty sad isn't it? It's even sadder to think about some of the things I would have missed out on had I not overcome that fear." -- JM.
"Absolutely Brillant! Powerful, Poignant and as Honest as prose can get! You sir are a true Poet!!!" -- Monte.
"Thanks Monte! I thought you might like it." -- R. Bennett.
"I thought it was very powerful. I totally get it, too. I've felt these feelings and this is as real as it gets. It takes a true writer to capture the true feelings of others when they have no personal experience of what they are writing about. Excellent work RB, as usual." -- Michelle.
"Thanks again Michelle!!" -- R. Bennett.
"Whoa! This says it all! Bravo!" -- The Reviewer.
"It's always a pleasure to read your poetry; it's very strong. You deserve to be on the most read list! Congrats. I'm working on songs lately--mostly therapy. Let me know what you think of Seven Eleven and Some. I value your opinion." -- Mia Angello, WI.
"Thank you Mia. I will review your work and let ya know what I think. " -- R. Bennett.
"Excellent job, RB. You're a lot deeper than you appear with that pretty boy face and smart ass attitude. I guess you didn't cut ALL your English classes at MSU. " -- Mr. Big B, Wood Dale, USA, IL.
"No, not all of them Mr. B." -- R. Bennett.
"There is a definite reason why this poem has historically stayed on the Top Hits list. This is a work of art. Well done." -- Harold, Worchester, MA, USA.
"Thank you Harold. Your kind words flatter me." -- R. Bennett.
"Interesting how we go into marriage with such unbridled enthusiasm to be different. I agree...she has a long wait." -- Royal D.


Worm�S Feeling by Fermin Moreno Gonzalez (1)
"William Blake did it shorter and better in The Sick Rose. Fewer words!!" -- Donna Moren.


Laid Heavy In The Suicide Chair by Olef Ransom Saulles (3)
"Excellent." -- JB.
"Olef, a morsel as bittersweet as the pomegranate Persephone erringly ate at Hades' table. I must admit, however, that the inconsistent tense is somewhat distracting. " -- Jon Sims.
"I also hear the indistinguishable voice, but it normally after too many Jack n' Cokes." -- R. Bennett.


Bosstwon, Massojoos-Hits. by Olef Ransom Saulles (5)
"Interesting choice of style. You never cease to amaze me. Later Algie." -- R. Bennett Okerstrom.
" 'I wish I could be trivial with you, laughing as if we were friends.' That pretty much sums it up for me." -- M. Ruffian.
"Olef... hi. Been a while, since I've read your work. It seems your style has altered a little. I am wondering if you're still that "...starving artist..."? I am still blown away by your mind, here, as in past works." -- Kimberly.
"Thanks Kimberly. I stopped posting for a bit because of school work and lack of replies but I through some revisions up after the semester. I noticed you had vanished from here as well. Its nice to hear from you." -- olef.
"Kimberly: If you come around again have a go at 'An American Summer'. Its raw and just a first draft but it gives a taste of my personal life. Hope to hear something from you again. Send me an email, let me know what you're up to." -- olef.


Sorry by T.C. Beto (4)
"This is simply beautiful, and just elegant with emotion. " -- soupprincess, Rolla, MO, USA.
"beautiful :) " -- Andy.
"This has to be for real. Somewhere there's a woman who turned away this sensitive, loving soul. I wonder if she ever regrets it? That story would make a great poem too." -- Teresa Hulbert.
" I found the poem searching for the name of a fomer lover whom I can not forget - Terri. The poem is how I feel that I behaved, I never imagined that I could find poetry so close to my actions and life. It is beautiful. " -- Tony Troche, San Antonio, Texas, USA.


Paper Boat by Vianne-Marie Fortier (2)
"I really enjoyed that. I didn't try to say anything more than it needed to. Well done" -- ka_sey.
"It's good Stinky Cheese. By chance, was this about someone getting high? The show of it all isgreat but I'm really not to sure about the meaning behind it all." -- Crap-Chan.


Paint A Sky Gray by Vianne-Marie Fortier (1)
"This is excellent. It captures feelings that I have felt before. Well Done" -- Ka_sey.


November Sun by Vianne-Marie Fortier (2)
"This is beautiful. I plan to read all of your poems as soon as possible. December dust is an awesome metaphor in this context. This reminds me of Dreamtrybe, an austin band who has a song about november (www.dreamtrybe.com). It also reminds me of Carly Simon's 'In Pain'...a great song for poets...you are a great poet..." -- Brenda Daigle, Birmingham, USA, AL.
"please tell me about the personification in the "November Sun"" -- tat, bkk, bkk, thailand.


Nothing Known; The Jester's Fancy; Feather by Sean Rich (2)
"A father's love is not to be underestimated. Amazing emotion in your writing. The Jester's Fancy has good rhythm. It controls the reader's pace. Feather is a clear illustration of complete freedom, without having any control. You're very talented. " -- J. Nabity, Omaha, NE, USA.
"Very moving. There is so much said in each of these... A tribute to poetry in general. The imagination, the pictures, the use of the language to create a balanced rhythm. A talented author." -- C. Eugene, Council Bluffs, IA, USA.


Mother by Ashley Burdett (1)
"Very beautiful" -- mattie.


Missed by R. D. Partee (3)
"Great lines of detailed images: "Bottle of water in one hand and plate of apple slices..." Great stuff! You have the senses and the images that inspire us other poets to greatness." -- Bruce, San Luis Obispo, CA, U.S.A..
"Hey old man don�t be lazy, get out of the porch and publish some more. Iread all of your work and i truly loved it. Be a good writer and don�t be selfish." -- iseldar kay.
"The most powerful line to me was "I wouldn't dare to read it again to the end." because that alone accurately measures the pain. I felt your love for her in that line." -- Mia Angello, WI.


Edible Universe by Enter The Gregor (2)
""Nothingness" is such a vast concept. You used good visual imagery. Keep writing." -- J. Nabity, Omaha, NE, USA.
"what the heck does this mean? where is nothingness? your edible universe makes me hungry. tell me about the brass ring, too vague." -- Mr. E-man, your town, anywhere, usa.


Angel by Ashley Burdett (2)
"wow need i say more?" -- Ryan L. Babcock, Baltimore, MD, United States.
"First off, the line: " I breathed my words, Towards him, Hoping he would change His mind". is your best line. One idea, for future writing, is to fully avoid any "cliche-like" words, senarios, ideas, actions. Show the world that your love is "different" so origional it was an "awakening". This poem has depth, certainly shows powerful emotions, but what sets it apart from others that have experianced/felt/lived this heartache. for instance, the line: "Means I must denounce the existance of all the saints and the angels.� is a very very good idea. But in my opion could be phrased in a more dynamic/effective manner. Don't take this out, revise it. Why not say, the saints and their angels. And then show how the angels and saints share a discourse similar to your relationship with your lover. Make the saints and angels go through a similar conflict, Separting them, giving the more powerful effect. I will read more of your work if you want. Honestly, the best poets are not those that have had the most training, or ever studied the most poetry...the best poets are the ones who can truely feel. I believe you posses the "feeling" to write that many are without. But you just need to express the emotion a bit more (redundant here) expressively. I know writing is personal, and your writing is personal, its "you" in many ways, but don't ever take critiuqe personally. Your poetry means far more to you than to someone else (in general) so their criticism is invaluable because they will point out things you may not notice, or may not want to deal with. Take it easy, happy writting, dave " -- ThatGuy .


Acr�sticas by Fermin Moreno Gonzalez (1)
"I love you more than anyone could ever know and if you love me to please tell me so baby I�m giving you all my life but please don�t tear it apart when you feel your world is down I�ll be there to make you simile instead of frown cause I�m just a girl that fell in love with you. And my whole world is going crazy my whole life ha has gotten lazy I feel I need to survive even if you don�t feel what I feel inside and I don�t care for what you put through cause I have fallen in love with you. Baby your so fine I want to make you mine but sometimes I�m afraid to try for what you might feel inside that you don�t care but all I know is that I have fallen in love with you Poem # 2 Love is for to as much is for you love can never be broken cause love is stronger than you. When I see you my heart starts pounding those are the feelings inside of me that they control them self maybe that�s why I love you & I don�t know what to do cause I�m going crazy about you. Poem # 3 When ever I�m scared I just close my eyes and think of you and when ever I open them I know I�m safe cause you are there when ever I need you. I think of you every time every minute every second and every time I think of you I know you will be there by my side when ever I need you. There no one else I look up to but you, you are the one that is there and the one that will always be there when ever I need you. You are my hero the one that protects me from harm the one that won�t let no one hurt me that�s why I look up to you that�s why I call you my hero Many times I think what�s the point off having a boyfriend and I finally know why they are there to keep you safe the one that gives you love and the one that will always say you are first to me than anyone could ever be. Poem # 4 Sometimes I wish that I could just stop thinking of you and try to think good things but I cant cause when ever I try I could never stop but thinking of you and I wonder what is that makes me think of you so much that I cant stop sometimes I wish I could just stop is not going to get me anywhere but just get sad and hurt I hope that after this I could go on and on to a happy place and some one will like for who I am and me like them they same way but until that day comes I will never see someone will those eyes like I see you but I give you my heart my sole my life but you will always be here when ever you need me cause I love you the most and I will never stop until you know and love is always blind that you cant see and love could get you hurt if you don�t look were you are looking at but you could always on me when ever you need me Poem # 5 Sometimes I wish I could just stop thinking of you and try to think good things but I can�t cause when ever I try I could never stop but thinking of you and I wonder what is that makes me think of you so much that I can�t stop cause is not going to get me anywhere but just get me sad. I hope that after this I could go on and on to a happy place and see someone that will like me and me like them back but until that day comes I will not see no one else with eyes like I see you. But I give you my heart my sole my life but you will always know that I�m here when ever you need me I love you the mot and I will never stop until you know I will always love you always about but like they say love is blind that you can�t see and love could get you hurt if you don�t look where you looking at but you could always count on me when ever you need me. Poem # 6 I love people that are kind, sweet, gentle and very good personality but what I like the most of them is that they are honest and trust worthy with me and that they could always count on me when ever they need me that what I like the most of a guy I also like when they write me poems or dedicate a song to me those are the guys that I like those are guys that are worth crying or fighting for. " -- katrina , Miami , U.S.A., Florida .


Wishful Thinking by J P (1)
"JP - I think you are a butterfly. You have a simplicity that goes beyond the 100+ word poems that I've read in these pages. Your words are sweet sonnets, or will be. Please keep developing them. Send me an e-mail. Let's correspond (No weirdness. Promise.) j" -- James, South, USA.


Winds Of Change by Kishore Daswani (2)
"Baby, I found you..." -- Kishaa.
"You have written well, young man. I believe you must be around 25 years old now. " -- David Copperfield.


Where Silence Is by Jane Byron (1)
"Wonderful! Heartfelt! Check out some my poems sometime. {Not all of them are CREEPY!}" -- david doc byron , vincennes, ind, usa.


What Makes Me Frown! by Peter De Dee (3)
"Short but to the point man, It made me think? I like it." -- Carl, New York, The U. S. A.
"You have put my own thoughts into words, And I thank you for that..I love your words." -- Shamisa., Canberra, Australia.
"I agree with Shamisa from Australia. You have put down the words that I feel about the Worldss ?????. I love your Words. " -- Alice S Halks, Mississippi, USA.


Thought by J P (1)
"I like this poem, it's exactly how i feel. :)" -- Suzi Harper.


Self Doubt! by Peter De Dee (2)
"You say it all in your description, I found it so intresting aswell as moving. " -- Lynne..
"I find your work strange but I find myself wanting more, I think I'am reading to much into it, Then I think I'am not. All I know is I like your stuff." -- Larry Collings, London, England.


Scales Of Fate by Kishore Daswani (1)
"good! maybe you should write another poem but this time about freewill." -- lori-ann.


Sacrifices by Jeanette Lero (1)
"Dear Jeanette, I really liked the imagery of your poem. Very moving and heartfelt, it could flow a little better I think. but then what do I know? Please, Send me an e-mail reply! " -- Paul A. Lero, Merriam, Kansas, USA.


Pals! by Peter De Dee (2)
"I had to review my English to understand your poem. But when I did thats when I enjoyed it. Thank you." -- Sarha Mulgram, Chicago, USA.
"You must be English...Only an Englishman can write like that....Enjoyed it." -- Alan Gold., London., England.


On Being Invisible by Nitro (3)
"Nice. Reminiscent of "Absolutely Nothing." (Perks of Being a Wallflower). Overall, this was an excellent poem." -- Bennett.
"Nitro stumbles and interprets the earth where as the greatest perceived writers rush past. Moments of lost time may become literature, be perceived as expletives, hung, taught with actions, force reactions. The borders of intellectual convenience suffocates - the invisible exits amidst angry words. Arguably, we are born to sing but stifled, made to work, laboring towards the compensation of a few. Obscurity is your virtue, exploit it. Read Bukowski ''Ham on Rye', Fante 'Ask the dust' and Hamsun's 'Hunger'." -- olef ransom saulles.
"This was beautiful...don't get me wrong, depressing as hell, but beautiful. And true. I can very much relate to teachers who grade you on content rather than writing ability...highly frustrating. " -- soupprincess, Rolla, MO, USA.


Mother Earth! by Peter De Dee (2)
"You are the truth Peter." -- Sueanne Stott, London.
"It's more true now, Then it's ever been....Thanks." -- Bet M., Las Vegas, USA.


Lost Remorse by Alex Wellington (2)
"I was touched by this... i would want to make love to this man...... multiple times.... no KY needed he is THE MAN!@" -- Bojangles E. Funkulton, chesapeake, va, usa.
"You're infatuated with myth, not the reality of 'once upon a time' where you probably would have died from a chest cold. Move to the country, get away from the crap and love now. Unfortunately I cannot equal the passion of the previous reviewer - sorry." -- olef ransom saulles.


Its Life! by Peter De Dee (3)
"Hey!..I like it." -- Debbie B., Canada.
"I think its one of your better one's, keep up the good work, I think you could make it!" -- George Carr. NZ..
"We love it. Are you English. We think you are. We are sorry if your not." -- Billbob Jo, Washington.


I Am My Own Greatest Enemy. by Olef Ransom Saulles (1)
"this one is junk...the title is a poem by itself by u did it no justice." -- sunny, dc, usa.


Grim-Winged Meeting by Fermin Moreno Gonzalez (2)
"A poem open to different meanings and interpretations. A short and precise description of today's world." -- Javier Monedero, Dublin, Ireland, Ireland.
"When we let go of all inhibitions and fears, or at least, thier hold on us, and take that step to intimacy and vulnerability. Yet, the writer knows, the blade is double edged. " -- June Kirkwood.


Gentleness! by Peter De Dee (4)
"I was moved." -- Ray Whitfield.
"We found your work intresting and easy to read. We enjoyed it very much..Short but to the point!" -- Carl, and Joan Robins., New Zealand..
"I feel your Gentleness throu yor words. Mixed but real." -- Mary B..
"We felt your thoughts. We hope you understand. We think you will.... Thank you for posting your time with us." -- Simon and Jane, New York City.


Ebony And Ice by Fermin Moreno Gonzalez (1)
"I LOVED THE STORY, VERY SAD BUT I LOVED IT, IT'S BEAUTIFUL" -- TEARPEARL, BILLINGS, MT, USA.


Drowning... by Lisa Diaz-Meyer (1)
"Very dark poem, but well written.Can't help but think what was on her mind while writting it.I'm one of Lisa's biggest fans & think she should keep writting more...MUAH!!!!" -- Nellie Gandules, Virginia Beach, Virginia, usa.


Ballad Of The Two Stakes by Fermin Moreno Gonzalez (1)
"hola quiera saber algo mas sobre este tema " -- erika claudia maldonado , Bolivia , A ndres iba�ez, Santa cruz.


The Reflection by Lizzy Bryan (2)
"hey,that's a very good poetry.i think it's about an affair,but the man didn't want to continue their realtionships.so the woman get upset. a very good poetry actually.and well-written also :0 keep u the good work girl" -- Andy Green, greenland.
"hey,that's a very good one.i love this one.i mean from all of yours. :) i think it's about a woman try to observe herself from another angle.she hates the woman in the mirror,which is meant she,herself.i guess it's about that, andy- from the greenland,get real!" -- Scotty.


The Beast Of Burden by Lizzy Bryan (2)
"say no more.you're great." -- Scotty, NY.
"No lack of greatness here, or anywhere for that matter. Its like every poem I read is genuis. Kudos" -- glib fuck.


Inwardly by Lizzy Bryan (8)
"a lot of misspell!what happened?are u in the rush or something?" -- Andy Green, greenland.
"yes,i'm in a hurry.sorry." -- Lizzy bryan, Chicago.
"it's a great poetry.but a lot of misspelled :) " -- michael brown, Illinois.
"Too muchen of a rush joben Fraulein." -- The Grammar Nazi.
"There is alot icould say but to simplify your poetry would be to say it is wonderful." -- Trent .
"thank you" -- lizzy bryan.
"i love your poetry.it's about some torturation or something?" -- Peter, Chicago.
"its beautiful i love it email me some time bye" -- tiffany.


I Could Tell U by Lizzy Bryan (9)
"Capatilization!" -- The Grammar Nazi.
"what de hell?" -- Andy Green, greenland.
"Hey, Grammar Nazi, it's 'capitalization'!" -- The Spelling Nazi.
"hahahahahahahahaha the grammar nazi could not spell very well though ;)" -- lizzy bryan.
"You have an anarchic mind. Damn the critics." -- olef ransom saulles.
"what de hell?" -- andy Green, Greenland.
"it's me.it describes everything bout me and her :(" -- randi, Alabama.
"The great olef ransom saulles has spoken. Dreams are only temporary Ms. Bryan." -- R. Bennett Okerstrom.
"i dont care how it is the poem is what counts and i think its great" -- tiffany, springhill, florida, usa.


Decision by Mandi Daddona (3)
"it's a great poetry!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!i love uuuuuuuuuuuuu" -- Andy Green, greenland.
"I'm confused. Interested, but confused. It happens a lot to me. " -- Hazzard.
"It's a nice poem...but don't you ever get that even in these kind of realisations there's still no answer...it doesn't go away it only hurts more because you understand and embrace it." -- duluoz, Birmingham, UK.


A Special Gift by Donna R Foster (1)
"I loved the poem. I myself have become more of a christian over the last several years, so I enjoyed it even more. Keep submitting, please." -- david doc byron, vincennes, ind., usa.


A Constant Love by Samantha Carter (2)
"Great sie" -- Medved, Moskow, NY, Hungary.
"Forgive me. On second thought, please don't because I find reading this more laborious than anything else. You put some flowery words and phases together and I notice you like to use "amidst" a lot and throw in phrases like "smallest hint that whispers," and "hushes me with awe" and "winds that change with fortitude or seasons long." Then there's that beauty "constant spectacles of burning blueish gas." You put this all together and although I can't criticize the grammar or spelling, you don't seem certain of whether this should be poetry or prose. Bottom line is these are just words and phrases thrown together without even a hint of a clearly defined theme or clue as to what you mean by the title. A lot of rambling that doesn't say much. Sorry, but you need to read more to understand what writing's really all about. And please don't come back with any b.s. like only the author can hope to understand its deeper meaning. Don't try to make every word or phrase part of a puzzle or mystery and put the burden on the reader to figure it out. " -- Richard.


Wandering And Wondering by Dylan Christopher (4)
"Very Poesque, the highest compliment that a piece of dark verse can receive." -- AC Keane.
"CHECK OUT THE LAW OF RAIN BY ISELDAR KAY" -- ERDN.
"I think there`s something really lovely about this poem, but I find the way you`ve laid it out makes it harder to read." -- Peter Rivendell.
"i really liked this poem. it makes me think of feelings, how they can be so confusing and beautiful and dark all at the same time." -- clio.


Stumble by Christy Mack (4)
"Yes Christy I will fill the empty spaces in your life. I will voyage to Baltimore and sweep you off your feet! By the way still no sign of No Name Rogers, much as I had assumed. Strangely enough no sign of Bennett Sims either (not that I mind). I've also posted that contest I've been longing to do for several months, because Tyna Aberdeen insisted I do it before leaving the board. It's blatantly labeled Fiction Contest. Yours truly, " -- AC Keane.
"Awsome poem Christy, you have such an awsome talent, never stop writeing babe." -- Christina.
"Lies lead to excellent pieces of work." -- R. Bennett Okerstrom.
"Excellent work indeed! You are a great writer Christy! " -- JM.


Sexual Haiku by R. D. Partee (17)
"Guess I've never really understood that Japanese? Haiku stuff. To me poetry should at least rhyme. But I'm sure to people who like, understand, and appreciate haiku, this is great." -- AC Keane.
"Poetry isn't confined to line breaks and rhyme schemes. A poem can be written in prose (my preferred medium) or in brain-spurts like Haikus or in a multitude of other ways. " -- Bennett.
"Correct me if I'm wrong, but isn't haiku 5-7-5? "Fire" is two syllables, thus making your last line a total of six." -- Sir Vancelot, Atlanta, Georgia.
"Really sorry Vancelot, but fire is only allowed to be 2 syllables South of the Mason-Dixon line. Thanks for reading the poem though." -- Partee.
"Satori in the heat of two lovers. I like it." -- Jon Sims.
"Mate, when I see someone so lost and confused about the direction of their life, I feel I must really say something. I'm not coniousseur, but I know shit when I see it. Cheers!" -- Brandyn (author of, "Hello, It's Death Ringing").
"The piece is great. Two criticisms: 1. The title becomes trite in light of the actual poems statement and 2. 'is so' is a very weak - weak verb - statement. This really has a good sound to it. " -- olef ransom saulles.
"Hey old man don�t be lazy, get out of the porch and publish some more. Iread all of your work and i truly loved it. Be a good writer and don�t be selfish." -- iseldar kay.
"Damn good! Read Andrew Lundwall" -- andrew lundwall.
"The Blind Leads the blind Does this sound like good Haiku? Do we give a shit?" -- Richard.
"Here are some of the many entries we have had in the past. We greatly appreciate you taking the time to give a present advisor fidelity funds mutual . I love you people :D" -- Waclawa, mexico, ny, mexico.
"Hi people. I love you so much! And i love acessories for cell phones verzion wireless phone , but soon i will be a father ;)" -- Czeslaw, mexico, ny, mexico.
"Don�t walk behind me, I may not lead. Don�t walk in front of me, I may not follow. Just walk beside me and be my friend. ;)" -- Adalbert, mexico, ny, mexico.


Over The Pass And Home by R. D. Partee (5)
"Ah, what can I say, I'm just writing this so at least something fills in the review column blanks." -- AC Keane.
"How are no reviews worse than your thoughtless "I posted these to fill in the white," Obsessive Compulsive Disorder-driven reviews? Anyway, I liked the poem--nice ambiguity allows multiple interpretations without being TOO ambiguous and leaving the reader confused." -- Bennett.
"I agree with Bennett. I rather like this poem. It is succinct and yet says and suggests more." -- Jon Sims.
"SOMETIMES I HAVE THE FEELING GOD IS A MEDIOCRE WRITER WHEN IT COMES TO CARACHTERS AND A GENIUS WHEN IT COMES TO CREATING LANDSCAPES. THIS IS WHY AT TIMES I FEEL I�M A BADLY SKETCHED CARACHTER IN AN AMAZING WORLD.I FEEL GOOD SOMETIMES I CAN WRITE THE STORY. WELL, THIS IS WHAT YOUR POEM MADE ME FEEL..." -- ISELDAR KAY.
"Hey old man don�t be lazy, get out of the porch and publish some more. Iread all of your work and i truly loved it. Be a good writer and don�t be selfish." -- iseldar kay.


High Haiku by Carl (3)
"OK that's it, I give up on trying to figure out these haikus." -- AC Keane.
"How do you figure that's a traditional 5-7-5 haiku?" -- Bennett.
"Sorry, mate, but this is a classifed ad, not a poem." -- Peter Rivendell.


Herod's Christmas List by Glyn Norman (1)
"I agreed with many of the connections of the past and modern era that you drew. But the one where you drew the connection between kings and politicians was a little vague in that there have always been politicians around even long before Jesus, and as in any profession some have been good some have been evil. It would be better to list a specific politician without playing favorites as to political affiliation, for instance these guys have all had one or two things wrong with their character: Benito Mussolini, Rudy Guiliani, Bill Clinton, etc. All in all it was a good second Nativity story for you." -- AC Keane.


Echoes by Susan T Fisher (2)
"Difficult it becomes to chase the fleeting memory of their face But I will not let time erase nor allow clouds to take their place" -- AC Keane.
"It most be hard getting over a lost love but you sound like a very intelligent woman and I'm sure you'll meet another lady love real soon." -- David.


Dismay by Sarah Levine Sahara (1)
"Yea, I once knew some naive trees too." -- AC Keane.


Vacation by Nelly B Capra (6)
"I thought this poem was a waste of time. The poem did not make any sense at all. There was no connection between the beginning and the end. I thought it was pointless." -- Chance, Normal, IL, USA.
"I don't quite understand what you are trying to get accross by writing this poem, the poem itself seemed empty and like it had no meaning. You need to elaborate and make it obvious what you are trying to write about." -- jenn, Chi.
"I really enjoyed this. Sometimes missing the little things can add up to something big. Well done." -- kyle, Athens, Georgia, us.
"Interesting poem. After listing possible ways of having a vacation, saying no to each one, the conclusion of the poem appears to cast some light to previous negations: the root of the word "vacation" is "to vacate" (to empty). Therefore a vacation either can stress an idea of emptiness or even reflect the emptiness of non-vacation. Either way the idea of vacation implies that there is emptiness somewhere. Perhaps the final word represents the need of simply being." -- joe.
"Ehmm..m. Sehr gut Seite! Ich sage innig..!:) bmw" -- BMW, ..., ..., ....
"i like it really vacation means vacate being empty nothing to do its really energetic try to vacate all inner so more space more creativity for the new one " -- sadaf, karachi.


The First With My Last by Richard Lynch (4)
"The poem is well written. It potrays many people about finding the right one and knowing that you have." -- Angela Gabriel, Lockport, Illinois, USA.
"Your poem was written very well. Your feelings really come through and flow naturally with the poem. I liked hearing the narrator of the poem did not seem to care about what had happened in his past and that the woman he is with now, he knows will be his last. It was also a poem that was easy to read, especially since there was a rhyming theme invovlved. " -- Kristen, Normal, IL, USA.
"WOW! That's just about all I can say. This reminds me of a great night with my boyfriend and I never could imagine that what we felt could be put into words. But, it seems like you did. I can't think of anything that could improve this poem. It's very well written because the scene is well described with great imagery and emotion. It was fairly short, but nothing was left out or overdone. " -- Amanda, IL, USA.
">> Hmmmmm.... "July 2000".... year Y2K..... am actually HOPING this was written either on July 13th through July 20th 2002... or you've been "reincarnated", Richard..... or perhaps this this was written in another lifetime of yours.... Wow! Absolutely beautiful! What we all hope and pray and dream about.... "THE" one... reflections of just knowing you've found the right "ONE"...well, its everyone's hope and dream... young, old, or disillusioned.... discovery and re-birth and hope found together..." -- Helen Jillian Scherrer, Marietta, GA, USA.


Lee And Katers by Sarah Levine Sahara (7)
"Something about this seems awful familiar. And I do not envy you the fact that your poem borders the story The Fate Winds. You see Sarah, not long ago this evil writer, who I can only describe as a demon made an appearance on the Storymania board. He has a nasty tendency to possess other people's bodies and take on different names, his current one is the Guardian. With the help of two other writers I'd thought we'd banished him from the board for good. Unfortunately though before we could the Guardian invaded the poem of a girl, her name was Hi Light. Despite our efforts the Guardian has returned, so I urge you Sarah to remain cautious, because this is similar to what happened before." -- EC Allen.
"this poem has been created entirely by me and me alone, i dont understand what you are saying...." -- sahara.
"Alright, I'll say it again, slower this time. There was a young girl poetess on this board by the name of Hi Light, and I'm afraid what happened to her will happen to you because coincidentally you are a young girl poetess. The situation is similar, "not" the poem. There is someone or "something" named the Guardian who gained entry into her poem and ruined it before it was deleted from the Storymania board. Hi Light's poem sat right ontop of the Guardian's story, just as your poem "currently" sits "right on top" of his current story The Fate Winds, which he has taken over from a writer named Lea Van Cleef. Please look just one story below yours and you will see the story the Fate Winds, hopefully this will then make a little more sense to you. I'm only telling you this for your own protection. I'd suggest putting in a password for your poem if you have not already done so, unless you wish to have the Guardian invade your poem as he did with Hi Light's, and then your poem will be altered in ways that you most likely will not wish to see. " -- EC Allen.
"Hello my dear, do not listen to the "long-winded" words of that goodie two shoes EC Allen. I enjoy preying upon the ignorance of young girls such as yourself. Join me, and I shall make you my bride!" -- Guardian.
"Trust me honey, I really think you should take EC's advice on this one, unless of course you want to become the Guardian's honeybunch. Oh! be sure to check out my story Striking the Skies, it's had plenty of hits but still no reviews. Good luck with your poetry!" -- Tyna Aberdeen.
"Please Sarah, take a look at the other story that borders The Fate Winds, it is called Belonging, in the reviews for that you will see that the Guardian admits to having invaded other people's work. So just be careful o.k.?" -- EC Allen.
"thanks for warning me" -- sahara.


Dreams Admist The Reality Of The Outerbound by Gerri R. Ward (1)
"Gerri: I like the rhythm even the syntax but the word choice is crude and a little melodramatic. The biggest criticism I have of Storymania submissions is the lack of quality reading. There is some ambiguity here - which I like - but you need to be in control for it to work. This poem shows a lot of promise, in my opinion you need only to sharpen your minds edge. Don't be afraid to use a thesaurus (many people scoff at that but do they scoff at a carpenter for using a hammer). I will utilize a notebook and dictionary when readin and every word I do not clearly understand is jotted down with a sentence. Be well," -- olef ransom saulles.


Cosmic Tides by Samantha Carter (1)
"Very nice... makes me feel small and yet, in a good way, completely in awe of the universe. Your use of language gives the poem an overall feeling of quietness and solitude. Well done!" -- Sam Waters, Washington, D.C., USA.


Carrier Waves by Richard Lynch (1)
"This is a much interesting poem. It's tender, and brave, and very cleverly done. Congrats!!! hopw to see ya some other time!" -- Samtuma.


Aloness by James S McClinton (3)
"You got it, you got it, yeah yeah you got it! Whooh!" -- The Cheerleader, Tyna Aberdeen.
"One cow, two cow, three cow--brown cow. Dr. Seussish rhymes prevalent--try another rhyme scheme (it was flowing pretty well before the third stanza--Maxine was too forced)." -- Bennett.
"This poem is very beautiful. It really touched my heart to hear that a person so alone all their life finally found someone to be with for the rest of their life. I would not change anything about it, it was excellent, short and sweet. Leave it as it is. " -- Brent.


The Poet by Robert M Hensel (3)
"Go ahead and rub it in their faces, eh?" -- Bennett.
"Much to like about this! What's next?" -- D K .
"Awesome perspective, but I think it would be really fun to go into more of what the poet actrually sees differently and why they can do this." -- Chris, IL.


My Love In My Dreams by Ghulam Mujtaba, Muji Shaikh (1)
"This poem was very well written. It had a lot of feeling in it, but was short and to the point. " -- Laura, Normal, Illinois, USA.


Kite by Ashley Burdett (1)
"As an "on-the-spot" reaction' i can tell that those word are actualy stemming from me, from myself' I mean the situation merely, because i believe everyone have aquanted those moments/ as a reader i think that nothing is that bad' and no one can take from anyone the "hope", sometimes it is more than enough." -- shulamit melamed, herzlia, Israel.


Gossip by Christy Mack (6)
"Christy I wish I could've reached you in a more direct way, but since your e-mail address doesn't appear, I guess this will have to do, and I just hope you see it. A friend of mine on this board No Name Rogers, said that you were a buddy of his, he called you The Big Mack Attack, so I thought you should be made aware that I think something has happened to him. Recently as of March 5th, I've been unable to contact NNR, it is as though he's disappeared off the face of the Earth, quite strange considering he was one of the most vocal members of board. I mean sure No Name Rogers is one of the few people who can take a chainsaw to the English language and get away with it, but he seems like a decent guy. I came across two things upon the Storymania board, and they have seriously freaked me out. One was an essay by Tabitha Lightfritz entitled Powers Greater than Evil, the other was a short story written by Lea Van Cleef entitled The Fate Winds. If you care any for our mutual buddy I'm hoping you will look at them. Most importantly, I'm wanting to know if you've heard from No Name Rogers recently, because even though it sounds surreal I think he may very well be "in" the story The Fate Winds. I guess we'll know if we don't see the poem Hey It's St. Patrick's!" -- EC Allen.
"Very eloquent and evocative. I can see why someone would call you "The Big Mack Attack."" -- Jon Sims.
"EC Allen - Actually, im not really good friends with NNR... but I do think there is some kind of a really talented genius mind behind all of his nonsense. I dont k now what has happened to him but if you would like to e-mail me its [email protected] I don't know where he is at all and I would like to help...so please e-mail me with details or anything ok?" -- Christy.
"Funny how so few words can say so much!" -- R. Bennett Okerstrom.
"Oh the damage those black widdows can cause!" -- JM.
"wow how true and yet some people bring the gossip on them selfs." -- Jeanette .


Falling Faces by Mark Chenery (4)
"I don`t really have anything terribly constructive to say, other than I like this poem." -- Peter Rivendell.
"I also like this poem, perhaps because I can relate to it" -- mattie.
"*****I thought this was really cool. I really liked the ending." -- d donely.
"i like this poem and i would like to see more of his work" -- louise, england.


Church by Ashley Burdett (1)
"Your poem is so creative and fresh. Good job, and keep on writing." -- Nelly.


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