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No Love Like Apathy by Crystalrae States (1) "Difficult to find something to like here. Can't make much sense of your use of tenses. In the first 14 sentences your talking about him and then you begin to talk to him. Your use of "apathy" makes me wonder if you understand the meaning of the word. In one breath, your bitterness turns to apathy, meaning you don't care anymore. Then you proceed to say your heart still belongs to him. Instead of "I continue to hold you captive," don't you mean, "you continue to hold me captive." ??? All in all, not a very polished effort for a college student who thinks she has writing talent. " -- Calvin Hobbs. Jimi by Cedric McClester (1) "Bravo! Melody?" -- Richard, Arlington, Texasa, USA. I Do Like My Whiskey by Cedric McClester (2) "I just recently found this site and I noticed that of the 39 new titles posted, fifteen belong to Cedric McClester. I checked out the other 100 or so entries attibutable to you and the only thing I can figure is that you must have a day job, (probably driving a truck) where you can think of these lyrics and possibly tape record them as you're driving. No one could possibly be willing to pay you for the trash accumulated on this site under your name. " -- Calvin Hobbs. "What's wrong with driving a truck? You are correct no one pays me for trash I posit, they pay for my true works of genius, which are eponymous. Thanks for taking the time to write. I still have a spot open in my fan club, so send in your registration fee soon." -- Cedric McClester. Too Much by Brianna Lashae Williams (1) "That is amazing. seriously! keep up the good work and please tell me yewr recording that" -- Caytlyn Isabella, United Kingdom. My Baby Girl by Chris Quinn (2) "hey people plz tell my about ur reviews about it x" -- chris quinn, melbourne, vic, australia. "plz guys tell me wat u's think" -- chris, melb, vic, australia. Marry Me by Ariel Little Red (1) "lol I could so totally see this become the next big Techno song out there... Seriously though, The poetic linguistics triggers a heartfelt emotion that us current generation teens feel yet don't comnunicate to the average peep. This quite a commodity and the almost dreamlike futuristic outlook is something that is so very real. Coming from you, I loved every second reading it... Goodluck :) " -- Izzy, San Diego, Ca, US. I See The Hand Of God (In Ordinary Things) by Peter Rego (1) "This is excellent. As one lyricist to another I like it very much. May you continue to write on." -- Cedric McClester. Go to page: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 26 27 28 29 30 31 32 33 34 35 36 37 38 39 40 41 42 43 44 45 46 47 48 49 50 51 52 53 54 55 56 57 58 59 60 61 62 63 64 65 66 67 68 69 70 71 72 73 74 75 76 77 78 79 80 81 82 83 84 |
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