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Song Of Desire by Misery (1) "Hey there, I like it. Good flow, I'll check your others" -- Chloe. �Daddy�S Boy� by Redzin (1) "you can tell this poem was written with much love and your sincerity shows in the words. I am glad you and your son have been back together for so many years. God Bless you both!" -- Colleen, lucerne, in, usa. To My Sister by Jasmine P Batey (7) "to all you sisters out there.... hold on to that bond, because it hurts when you loose it..." -- Jasmine, The Auther. "This makes my eyes water. It's really really really really really good. But I'm like what you've portrayed your sister as, and It's not that I don't want to tell my family how i feel, it's that I don't know how and don't want to burden them. With writing you can hide behind it, wear a mask and post it for the world to see, and they never have to know who the person really really is. I would Love to read your sister's poem that inspired this work of art though. So if you don't mind... But yeah, don't worry so much, she'll come good. And if she doesn't just know she is probably trying to save you from worrying, Keep going with your words though. You Done Good" -- Frankie, AUSTRALIA MATE. "Hey thanks frankie. My sister has her work on the site too, its Chloes batey... it wasnt realy one poem that made this - it was heaps of little things. but search her shes better than me thanks again...." -- Jasmine, The Auther. "Well thankyou for replying, and so swiftly too, I was just going to read this once more, before logging out. I think it's going to be hard to find something better then this one piece of honesty. " -- Frankie, AUSTRALIA MATE. "I will try to email you Frankie, but my emails having troubles." -- Jasmine, The Auther. "...wow. That is pretty much how i felt about 3 years ago. I lost my bond with my sister, and i can't get it back..." -- zebrastar. "zebraster, I really am sorry for you, and I hope you can fix the bond." -- jasmine, The Auther. Passion, Desire by Misery (1) "Like this one too. You're pretty good :) keep writing" -- Chloe. Nothing Is Forever by Mike Piotrowski (2) "Hey! I love the way you capture the moment with words, i like having pictures in my mind as i read :) It also ends pretty sadly and i love the way you start pituresque and then contrast it :) Loved it ! Can you please give me some feedback on a few songs, thanks i'd be so greatful :)" -- Annabelle, Lawrence, Kansas, USA. "I am very glad you liked the poem Annabelle, and I would love to look at your songs and give you some feedback. Though I am not very good with songs, since I have never written one... but I can try to give you some feedback on the formation and usage of the ideas you are trying to convey in them. Once again, keep writing hard! -Mike." -- Mike Piotrowski. Nidiot by Briony Carvalho (1) "Hard write but done well lucky guy" -- Jeremy. - How Beautiful Is She? by Redzin (1) "WOW! THIS POEM ABOUT YOUR WIFE BLEW ME AWAY! THIS IS THE POEM EVERY WOMAN WOULD LOVE TO HAVE WRITTEN ABOUT HER! AND I MIGHT SUGGEST SUBMITTING THIS POEM TO CARD COMPANIES. THIS WOULD BE A NICE VALENTINES DAY PARTY...WOW...IF MY HUBBY GOT ME THAT CARD, IT WOULD MAKE MY DAY. DEFINITELY ONE OF THE BEST LOVE POEMS ON THIS SITE!" -- COLLEEN, lucerne, in, usa. Fix You by Chloe L Batey (2) "pretty good... 3rdd stanza, 2nd last lines dont make sense (to me at least) but other wise really good." -- anon, Milperra, NSW, Australian. "Thanks anon. It basically means that the words that were screamed at this person, didn't touch him/her they just bounced back :)" -- Chloe . Ever Again. by Jasmine P Batey (3) "hey there, pretty good, I would recommend rewording the last two bits, at least the last two lines of the third stanza and the last stanza is a bit confusing to me. anyway. pretty good :). good on ya" -- Chloe. "I think the last stanza means that if the guy's dead she can't kill him again and get the satisfaction of thrusting a knife through a living body.However, check for punctuation errors like i, im, missing commas, capitalization deficiency, and replace periods with commas when applicable, or semi colons if you know how to use them." -- Michael J Williams, Redding, CA, US freakin' A. "This was the shizzie! GOOD!" -- Kris. Bleeding Mess by Misery (2) "wow, very emotive, really good! I don't know what to say =] but you did leave out a comer on the second 'the lifeless, dying, dead' but this is really good!" -- Jasmine B, AUS. "And you miss Jasmine, you spelled comma wrong :) Thankyou for your review" -- Misery, Author. 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