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The Color Of My Actions by Randall Barfield (1) "wow great job," -- Jeanette. Three Poem Collection by Randall Barfield (2) "you should read Rilkes 'letters to a young poet'. stay away from cliches(i.e. all of the kings horses) stay away from love poems. you have a seed in your writing, but need to stay away from sentiment" -- monkey, fairbanks, ak. "I'm not very good about taking advice, it seems, but I will try to improve. Thanks for your concerned comments. I suspect you have experienced a high level of success to feel completely free to suggest these things to me." -- Barfield. Yesterdays Fool by Fyona Doyle Latz (1) "I like the idea. I even like the poem. But, moments unconfessing? This is wringing don't you think" -- Fir, Zoetermeer, zh, Netherlands. All That You Are by Peggy J Bertrand (1) "I like All That You Are. Thanks for writing it. I hope to read more of your submissions." -- randy. The Gravity by Randall Barfield (1) "I really enjoyed teh piece, I like your untraditional style and teh point you'r making. " -- Fy, Wollongong, N.S.W, Australia. Shit by Randall Barfield (1) "Oh crap, I forgot what I was going to say lol Why did you give this such an interesting name?" -- Steven. Years by Michelle Worswick (1) "Good movement, don't feel that you have to rhyme, don't let that restrict your word choice and strangle the potential of the poem. Nice and sweet though." -- Fy, Wollongong, N.S.W, Australia. The Photograph by Dusty A Tincher (4) "you should b t8ken apart by 47.5 monkeys on a tuesday u idiot scum! pssssssst.. there is also a q" -- Jey, i live in zimbabwe u fool, dont ask its priveleged inf., y do u want 2 no?. "as i vaas svaying i am a german so i say v alot. up ur u vrikin vool. c? anyway here is the q i promised. Q. there happy now. i vant 2 eat some pikles good by 4 now u pikle eating person. Ni! PS you need 2 add negative numbers 2 da ratink chart i put it as low as vit can go!" -- Jey, i live in zimbabwe, dont ask that is privilaged info., u do u vant 2 no?. "u still havnt put a vrikin negative number on the vrikin vrating chvart! eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeerg! &#$@*&! i will be hating you 4 da vrest of vour live. grrrrrrrrr vear me u mortal. Mwahahahaahahahahahahaha! by da vay i still give it a vone (1)" -- Jey, i live still in zimbabwe just in case u were wondering, /, \. "excuse me stupid svon's put downs, he is an idiot." -- Jey's dad, vy do u vant 2 no?, shut up u stupid dog on elm st., sfjkh. The Best Christmas by Randall Barfield (1) "awe some poem." -- J. Planting Seeds (Oya's Garden) by Adrienne Anderson (Queen Alafia) (1) "This rocks!" -- Margarette, San Francisco, USA. Nothing Bad Ever Happens Here by Mike Schiller (2) "Absolutely chilling......You've done a superb job here, Mike of conveying the shock, horror and disbelief!! A wonderful read! (glad you're ok!) Dusty" -- Dusty, Winston-Salem, NC, SA. "Great read! I believe you. Just don't stop living, experimenting, having new adventures because of HIM! Don't let people like him decide your life for you. Luck." -- Randy. My Hero by Kirsten McManus (1) "Short and Sweet, don't feel that you have to rhyme though. Nice imagery adn use of movement." -- Fy, Wollongong, N.S.W, Australia. I Want To Know by Kirsten McManus (1) "Ooooh i liked this one a lot, i liked the others too but this one was really good! GO KIRSTO" -- Steph, Topeka, KS, USA. I Know Him by Amanda Rae Mealer (1) "Amanda, I'm not really into poetry but I enjoyed this one. I really understood what you were saying about how much God loves you. Even when others reject you for who you're not, God accepts you for who you are. I like that. " -- Alberta , Atlanta . Chewing Stone by Amanda Rae Mealer (1) "It makes sense enough to me. " -- Pearl. Who Am I? by Chuck Stewart (4) "This is a really good poem. Keep up the good work!" -- Tony, Arlington, Texas. "This is a beautiful piece. God has given you a talent for putting words together. Keep it up!" -- Jerrica N. Zel'dovich, U.S. of A.. "I really enjoyed read'n your poem, it was incredible the way you stepped into God's "shoes" and you told the way He felt when we neglect listening to him. It was lovely!" -- Catalina Starr, St. Louis, Missouri, USA. "I really liked this poem you have a gift and your gift is from GOD, use it." -- Micheal Jordan, hampton, washington, USA. Watching Madness. by Alberto Pupo (1) "Very sweet" -- Lace Gypsy. Skarlett Bracelets by Brenda Poor Daigle (9) "At first I didn't like love/rotted out together. Overall there is something special about the poem. Nice." -- Randy. "I think it is a very good piece of work. Very original!" -- Kate. "It seems to strike deep into one's soul, especially if one knows the soul." -- vernon, birmingham, al, usa. "It makes you think and really feel for the author." -- Karen. "Very powerful great combo of fear, courage and beauty. It is a very deep poem. Great work I can see it came from your heart." -- Spit, Austin, TX, USA. "This poem captures perfectly the way emotions can warp our thoughts and actions. I think it shows how a state of mind can begin to feel like home, no matter how broken of a home it is. It is a great piece, by an obviously talented woman." -- Joe Mc, Chickasaw, AL, USA. "This is a provocative look at what seems to be a very traumatizing circumstance. It captures extremlely complex emotions. . .put torment in poetic form, if that is possible. I must confess that the spelling of the title bothers me." -- Heather, Huntsville, AL, USA. "You can hear the world cracking a lifetime away...I liked the part about the corpse..." -- Joel, Birmingham, USA, Alabama. "Very original and very true to life. Amazingly honest and heartfelt...a poem that makes you realize that you are not the only one=)" -- John, Baton Rouge, LA, USA. Roar Of The Silence by Jerrica Nychole Zel'dovich (1) "i think you are very special and not very ordinary...i love your way with words and imagery...keep pouring out those words" -- Brenda, Birmingham, AL, USA. Hanks by Randall Barfield (1) "Yep! Got it. You play sweet word notes, Randall. A lovely post-it worth the read." -- dee. Africa Rising by Chanie Agishtein (5) "Wow Chanie, this is a good poem. Keep working on others and good luck. I liked the topic a lot." -- Randy. "Nice poem Chanie, rolls nicely of the tongue. I do miss some depth however." -- Fir, Zoetermeer, ZH, Netherlands. "Just one suggestion: the second and fourth lines rhyme in every stanza but the third. You may want to correct that so it flows the same. Otherwise I like it a lot." -- R. Bennett Okerstrom. "The lines might be "good" but the message the poet tries to portray is false--he might be saying it unintentionally....The lines though not deep are surprisingly and refreshingly engaging...The symbols are alive. But of the devices are blunt, needing honing...." -- Adesola Olufade, Ota, Ogun State, Nigeria. "Its a buetfull poem that rely gives you a picture a Africa. Good job Chan. by the way, shes a girl." -- Ether Agishtein, passiac, New Jersy, Amirica. Michael by Randall Barfield (1) "Brilliant. I miss him too. :)" -- Jenn Thomas-Orr, Belmont, CA, United States. You And Me Poem by Michelle Jones (8) "The poem's idea was good, but your rhythym kinda sucked. Actually, it was just plain bad. You REALLY need to work on that" -- Larrisa. "ok your peom was a good idea. it was pretty good, but is it true? like have you ever been actually in love or something? " -- christy. "If you try to write things that people LIKE, try not to write crappy poems, okay?" -- Daphne. "I tihnk that your poem is great. True, sometimes your rhythm was a little off beat, but I still think it was all around good. I really liked the idea. " -- Callie. "My God, that sucks" -- Letitia. "Jesus Christ! Are you TRYING to butcher poetry and everytihn about it? "I write for me"? B.S.! You write manufactured shit! So, I just suggest you stop writing now and GIVE IT UP! Before you get more hate mail." -- Emily Jones. "Michelle...the people who gave u these reviews are obviously freaks and u need to delete those reviews. I am a published poet and I thought your poem was very sweet and sincere and the rhythm was fine. You'll get more polished with time and experience but u need to rid yourslef of people who have no class or education. Just go to the edit your work section of storymania and go down to the point where it says edit your title and scroll down to manage reviews and delete what these horrid people said. Good luck Michelle...only write for yourself no one else." -- A worried peer. "Nice poem, Michelle. I happen to review this poem of yours on the way to searching a classmate with the same name. Your poem is as endearing as it tugs at the heart strings -- simultaneously. And you certainly don't seem to mind all that criticism, treating it like water off a duck's back! Never mind who you write for. When the words flow, put pen to paper and keep going. Good luck with your future." -- Jay. The Son Will Rise Again Over New York City by Rikki Duncan (2) "Well written Rikki, you have a talent for writing. Nice job! " -- Jim. "this one i like alot rikki well penned ...just the last two lines didn't seem to flow as well ! seemed to have to strain to fit the ryme in? think for such a beautiful poem you should maybe cange the end..make it a little longer ..i feel the ending should have more of a punch." -- susan morris, OLDHAM, LANCS, United Kingdom. The River by Erin Megan Lindner (1) "moody and true. Some care on the spelling would help it to higher acclaim (Magestic! infold!) like a lovely painting but the errors were taking the eye from the joy of looking. Keep it up. Good stuff. Keir." -- keir hardie, forres, highlands, scotland. The Life In You by Branson Storm (1) "A very nice piece, Branson. I enjoyed the feeling it gives of one wanting to give hope, even during one's own desperation. I'll be looking for more... Dana" -- Dana C., Auston, TX, USA. The Hope Of N.Y.C. by Rikki Duncan (1) "No help needed found you ..just had a quick look through your poems but tocomment tonight without reading fully would not do your work the justice it deserves think im going to like reading your poetry and will say more when i have had a chance to read properly and i am not so tired thanks for sharing with me your poetry enjoying the read " -- SUSAN MORRIS, OLDHAM, LANCS, United Kingdom. The Experiment... by Alberto Pupo (1) "Interesting!! I liked them!! Just one question... "goats"?" -- Wolfa. Sinking by Rikki Duncan (2) "Rikki: You are gifted, spiritual and I believe an earth angel this world needs; pursue writing and knowing the joy of love for man. Remain with a heart of compassion and I KNOW GOW will answer your wishes and prayers." -- L.CAR, Half Moon Bay, CA. "GOD not GOW..... God Bless You, Rikki" -- L.CAR, Half Moon Bay, CA. Oh My Love, How I Miss You by Rikki Duncan (3) "Wow, Rikki, this is a very strong poem and is quite well written in most places. Thanks for sharing!" -- Randy. "So beautiful Rikki....." -- val covell, hull, united kingdom. "This is fantastic reading a very talented and caring man.." -- Allison campbell, mallaig, Scotland. Nocturnal Godess by Alberto Pupo (1) "I love your recently posted poems. They just keep getting better and better. " -- Alison, USA. Eyes Deceive by Alberto Pupo (1) "uh.... is "deceptionary" a real word?" -- jackie. End Me by Bob (1) "I find this very powerful. Is it influenced by Rap? I can imagine it with that kind of delivery." -- Peter Rivendell. Egg Shells by Pauline Wright (3) "Brilliant- I can't believe how well she said, in so few words, what I feel so often. " -- Stacey, fairlawn, NJ. "um. goddamn. that was really strong. I'm gonna have to think about this one." -- Mike. "I get ya...'Ephemeral rushes of smile, Incorrigible, short-lived'...but it's not always so harsh, is it? we only get moments of perfection to embrace, thats the way it is...try not sulk too much..it could be worse." -- jonn. August 1996 by Toni Jaquay Lynch (2) "WOW! That was dep and thoughtful. Very, very good!" -- Skyler, Bklyn, USA, NYC. "It's certainly an eerie poem. Quite well done. Congrats." -- Randy. Angels With A Light by Rikki Duncan (2) "This was poignant and beautiful......I'll be back to read the rest of your work!!!!! Great job!!!!" -- Dusty Tincher, Winston-Salem, NC, USA. "another great piece of work" -- VnWarDog. America, I Weep For You by Rikki Duncan (2) "awesome love it" -- VnWarDog. "tTher are no magic dragons, there is no silver sea, but there is heather on the hillside, so there is peace for me." -- SUSAN MORRIS, OLDHAM, LANCS, United Kingdom. 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